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An argumentative essay on technology world.


otiliagmercado 1 / -  
Oct 8, 2011   #1
Hi im new to this, i have to write an argumentative essay on technology world. Can someone please let me know if this is good. thanks

The internet is a wonderful resource that greatly has improved our lives today, although in the hands of the wrong person is being used in a bad ways.

The use of internet not only does it put a world of information at the fingertips of students and teachers but they help students learn how to do research papers and essays. I it is also easy for teachers to average grades and keeps track of them. There is a much wider span of information and are easier for students to research on. Teachers can keep track of papers and printable things. Such as writing a report and keeping track of worksheets. It also helps teachers and parents correspond with each other about student's grades or other things. The learning mediums on the Internet are much more flexible and quicker to get to the masses than any other information before. It used to take months, years, or days in the least to get information to society. Whereas now it can take mere minutes to get the information to the parents. Although you still had the same concern with the traditional media. I believe soon you will see an almost total switch from the traditional books and the traditional pen and paper to a completely digital age of e-books and emailing of papers.

The internet offers a variety of benefits to everyone who is willing to use it the right way. The enormous amount of information available and the many uses one can have through the internet have made it the most valuable tool in various settings of a person's life. The Internet has an enormous amount of information added on it every day and it's generated as the most

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powerful source of information. Also, the use of the Internet has made jobs easier and oversimplified tasks that would take an enormous amount of time and paperwork before. Furthermore, the Internet has become a great tool for avoiding the hassles of the banks, offering the chance to make the transactions quickly and safely. It also offers an extensive source for shopping and the easiness of having your products delivered straight to your home or work, if you decide you do not want to go out. Furthermore, the general use of the Internet has opened new areas of jobs in all countries and expanded the availabilities of working from home (Fountain 1).

Facebook and its advantaged, there are a lot of benefits in using Facebook just to mention some of its benefits. Facebook is one of the friendliest social network in the world. People could send messages you have the choice to send the message as an open manner or to send it privately. There are privacy settings on Facebook that can make it so only your friends can see your wall posts, or some of your information You can also make it so non-friends can only see your profile picture. Another advantage of Facebook is being able to see what your friends and family are doing, and they know what you are up to. Facebook also reminds you about important events and friends' birthdays. I use Facebook because I have my son in the Air force, he is stationed in Honolulu Hi and by using the technology I could get inch ouch with him. I use face time on my iPhone or the web cam and immediately I could see my son. I have a lot of family members that I have not seen in a long time and by smirching the internet I have found some of my family members. If you use the internet correctly you could have a lot of use for it (Reich 5)

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The internet is now an essential part of our professional and personal lives. In the past, people would call or would take a trip to the bank to check their account balance or wait for it to arrive in the mail. People went to the post office in order to send a letter, a post card or to buy stamps. Nowadays, the majority of people are using the internet to surf for a variety of information, check bank accounts, shop online, send messages, play games and communicate with family and friends all over the world.

Although the internet is one of resources that has become essential in our daily lives. It is also a bad source for people that use it to harm others. There should be some restriction when using the internet to make house bombs, for the pedophiles, terrorists using the internet, when uploading videos containing inappropriate images, porn and rapists. We parents need to careful when our children are surfing the internet to prevent our children from falling into these sick minded peoples hands.
mrfrank 2 / 3  
Oct 9, 2011   #2
"I it is also easy for teachers to average grades and keeps track of them"
"Facebook and its advantaged"
It would be better if the essay is read twice so that such errors can be avoided.

There is also some repitation in the first paragraph which should be avoided.
You also havn't expalined properly on how the internet is harmful for us.You need to balance both the good's and the bad's

As the topic say's "technology",you need to widen your approach.write about other technology besides the internet
:)


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