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Apple canning process; 'sterilizing from bacteria'


upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 19, 2014   #1
The diagram shows a process of making an apple canning. Apple canning is one of many fruits canning in the world. The following is the process of making canned apple.

Canned apple manufacture is divided into long process. It is start from process hand picking in the plantation by farmer until dispatch to various sellers.

The first process is done in the plantation apple. Farmer is doing selection of apple witch good quality and they are taking by hand picking. Then, truck carrier apple comes to transporting apples for Carrie to the factory. The next stage, all of apples undergo is washing process and then is selecting process one by one for quality. After that, cold storing process and then enter to weighing. After weighing all of apples is peeled and then is sliced. Apples id Slicing with the same shape size pieces. The next process is canning.

All of apple canning is sealed and then is cooked for sterilizing from bacteria. After that, is labeling. In each can of apple is labelled by printing machine special for canning food. After that, all of the can is entered into storage. And the end of all process is dispatching.

In conclude, all of the long process of canning apple is assured the quality of apples and assure of the taste of apples.



Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 19, 2014   #2
Then, truck carrier apple comes to transporting apples for Carrier to the factory. The next stage, all of apples undergo isare [quote=upinipin]

After that, cold storing process and then enter to weighing

washing process and then is selecting process one by one for quality.[/quote]... confusing... where is subject ?

After weighing all of apples isare peeled and then is sliced. Apples idare [quote=upinipin]

After that, is labeling. ....you should put subject
In each can of apple is labelled by printing machine special for canning food. After that, all of the can is entered into storage. And the end of all process isare dispatching.

.... after using modal, you should put V 1
Slicing with the same shape size pieces.[/quote]

:)
OP upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 19, 2014   #3
hi eva...

i think you should read again about my word in that sentence.

in that sentence can (verb), i mean it is not can (modal)

can is mean same as canning
ernhy 17 / 28  
Apr 19, 2014   #4
Then, truck carrier apple comes to transporting apples forCarrie to the factory.

i think you mean 'Carry'

you should be careful :)
BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 19, 2014   #5
Itis start from process hand picking in the plantation by farmer until dispatch to various sellers.
OP upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 22, 2014   #6
witch good quality

witch is good quality
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 22, 2014   #7
It is starts from process hand picking in the plantation by farmer until dispatch to various sellers.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 24, 2014   #8
The diagram shows a process of making an apple canningproducing canned apple .

Apple canning is one of many fruits canning in the world.

This is totally irrelevant . This task is a report writing task and you need to report your observations here. You should not tell anything other than what the diagram presents and therefore you need to limit your writing strictly to what you observe.


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