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Ielts: apple is canned; 'there are many processes'


ernhy 17 / 28  
Apr 18, 2014   #1
The diagram shows processing an apple can manufacture much money.

In general, there are two ways to process an apple become interesting product.

As the graph illustrates the process starts from hand picking where apple is taken by farmer and then they sell to company. The company buys apples from farmer, after that the company washes apples, choose according to quality, and the last process before canning is grading.

At the canning process, the first manner company does peeling and corning where apples opened by worker. Next processing is canning, sealing, cooking, and labeling to care apples quality. The company must ensure that apples in a good equality after that they will dispatch apple canned for sale.

To sum up, there are many processes that company must do if they want to sale apples. However, from this processing company can get much money.



Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 18, 2014   #2
The company must ensure that apples in a good equality after that they will dispatch apple canned for sale (V ing) .

Hi erny,
after using preposition, you should use V ing
:)
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 21, 2014   #3
The diagram shows processing an apple can manufacture much money.

You have to pay lots and lots of attention to your grammar and clarity of your sentences. The above sentence is pretty confusing :(
The diagram shows the process of manufacturing of canned apple.

In general, there are two ways to process an apple become interesting product.

Hey, why do you say there are two ways? From where you get that information or the idea? What I see in the diagram is the complete process of manufacturing canned apple;

Overall, there are fourteen stages in the process of manufacturing canned tins of apple.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 23, 2014   #4
OMG ... this is the third thread in a row I am providing my comments on the same topic :D
It's good so that you can read other threads and collect lots of useful info to improve your writing :)

The diagram shows processing an apple can manufacture much money.
In general, there are two ways to process an apple become interesting product.

Since dumi has already commented on grammar aspect, let me do some sample intro and overview for you for this task;
The diagram shows a complete process of canned apple production. (INTRODUCTION)
Overall, the process comprises of fourteen stages from picking apples from trees to transporting apple cans for sale. (OVERVIEW)


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