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An amazing place that you visited

silentheart     Oct 17, 2009, 06:40am   #1
In my life, I have seen a lot of beautiful places, but there was one place that I'll never forget. The place that I visited was amazing, very beautiful, and I'll never see a place like the place that I saw. The name of the place was Toela, and it's about two hours from Sulaimaniyah. The road was amazing because it was between the high mounts that covered with the green grass. Also, I loved the place because there was a rain which made an amazing scene with the mounts that covered by the green grass. I took a lot of photos for the amazing natural; it was an unforgettable day in all my life.

can anyone please correct my paragraph......

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Author: Sean, EssayForum.com
Oct 17, 2009, 08:23am   #2
What exactly is this paragraph for? It seems a bit simple. In any event, here are some grammatical fixes for you:

"and I'll never see any other place like the place that I saw"

"it was between the high mountains that were covered with the green grass"

"with the mountains that were covered by the green grass."

"I took a lot of photos of the amazing natural scenery"

"it was an unforgettable day in all my life. "

silentheart     Oct 17, 2009, 09:31am   #3
thaaaaaaaaaaaaanx alooooooooooooot

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