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'This issue is two-sided' - advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country


thoigiandeyeu 4 / 1  
Apr 19, 2010   #1
OMG... I feel a little bit confused of repetition. I hate using too much 'people' , 'they', 'can'...Please help me!

Today, many young people have a dream of living and working abroad. In fact, the number of people in my country who go abroad for studying and immigration has increased significantly in recent years. To my way of thinking, this issue is two-sided. Although it brings a lot of benefits to people, they can have unexpected difficulties.

First of all, living and working in a foreign country has many advantages. It is a tempting opportunity for people to work in a professional international working environment, therefore they can gain a lot of useful experiences and valuable knowledge from world-class experts and collegues who come from different countries in the world. In addition, people have a chance to learn international languages when they live with native speakers. Furthermore, people can access to updated science and technology achievements, discover new areas and learn interesting things in foreign countries. Apart from that, people can enjoy a comfortable and convenient life due to the fact that the quality of life in some countries such as United States or England is very good. Besides, living in a strange country make people more confident and independent. For example, students who study far from their home have to do everything and solve their problems by themselves without help and support from family.

Nevertheless, people can get a lot of serious difficulties. Language barrier is considerd as one of common problems they face up everyday. It has a huge impact on the communication, life, work and study of people. Moreover, cultural divergences can lead racial conflicts and contradictions. Some young people can be involved in illegal actions because o the lack of experience. The discrimination in race, religious and sex sometimes is very dangerous to foreigners.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 20, 2010   #2
Good corrections from Azeri... here is another option for thje first part:
Make this 2 sentences:
It is a tempting opportunity for people to work in a professional international working environment. Therefore, they can gain a lot of useful experiences and valuable knowledge from world-class experts and collegues who come from different countries in the world.

where is your conclusion?

I agree. Also, the conclusion could be introduced at the end of the first paragraph, right after this sentence:
Although it brings a lot of benefits to people, they can have unexpected difficulties.

:-)


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