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Abortion: Why it should be Illegal.



juliat cungThreads: 1
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Oct 25, 2009, 09:31pm   #1
Abortion has been a controversial topic for as long as the idea has existed. People argue that it is the mother's body, the mother's choice. Others say that a life is a life, no matter how small. Do you really think that anyone has the right to murder an innocent's human being? I disagree. Here`s is why it should be banned; many will argue that abortion is wrong because it's taking a human life, no matter what stage of pregnancy it is in, it's very bad for the mother's health and the after math of an abortion could very well go the opposite of what they had envisioned. Banning abortion can be a big achievement but it can always be done if it's compulsory.

No one in the world has the right to even think of murdering an innocent child. Just because a fetus may not have a complete eye or leg formed doesn't mean he or she isn't a human. Many people who are against death penalty are in favour of abortion. Abortion is one of the worst types of murder because it is the killing of a person who has not committed any sin. Those who practice abortion should receive the same penalty that they give the baby.

A psychologist agrees that about 10% of the 1.6 million women who have had abortion experience severe emotional trauma. Some of the physical damage can result from an abortion- damaged cervix, perforated uterus, haemorrhage, and infection are just a few of the side effects that could occur. A study published in the American Journal of Psychiatry indicated that 50% of women who have abortions experience post-abortion emotional distress. Another study conducted by Dr. Philip G. Ney and reported in The Psychological Aspects of Abortion found feelings of anxiety in 43% of surveyed women, depression in 32 % and feelings of guilt in 26%.

Did you know a baby can survive an abortion? When this kind of disaster occurs it is very sad. What happens is that the baby that was supposed to die ends up sustaining the abortion process. You might be thinking to yourself at least it survives the evolution, well you're incorrect. Usually what will happen is that the baby will have missing parts on his or her body. Seventy percent of babies that survive abortions die at the age of 4. Thirty percent of the survivors will have complications on his or her life meaning autism etcetera.

Banning something this big can be impossible if you think it's impossible but if you think possible it's always possible. Having a good reason like this essay will not only give you confident but also supporters. Having an abortion is the act of inhumanly being and also it's the act of murder. It also has big risks for the mothers and the baby. Hopefully someday this essay will have a big impact on the humanity.

I would be more than happy if you can edit or point out my mistakes.
It's due tomorrow :(.
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EF_SeanThreads: 6
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Oct 26, 2009, 04:44am   #2
Your essay is too shallow. I don't know if you have time to fix it before you hand it in, but you might want to do so anyway, simply as practice for the next time you have to do such an assignment. For one thing, you don't really define and build up your own arguments very well. For another, you don't address the opposing point of view at all, which is sort of necessary when writing on an intractable issue such as this.

juliat cung:
Just because a fetus may not have a complete eye or leg formed doesn't mean he or she isn't a human.


Okay, so when does a fetus become a human being? At the very moment of conception? Can a single fertilized cell, with no brain, no capacity for pleasure or pain, not even the smallest spark of sentience, be considered a human being in the same way you or I can, even though it cannot possibly survive as anything other than a part of its mother? If so, on what grounds do you grant it such a status?

juliat cung:
Another study conducted by Dr. Philip G. Ney and reported in The Psychological Aspects of Abortion found feelings of anxiety in 43% of surveyed women, depression in 32 % and feelings of guilt in 26%.


So? In the broadest possible sense, this is at most a good reason why women should choose not to have abortions. It is not a good reason for taking away their ability to make such a choice. More narrowly, it raises the question of why women would choose to have an abortion if it takes such a toll on them. You ignore this question, which you absolutely have to deal with if you want your essay to be at all convincing to anyone.

juliat cung:
Did you know a baby can survive an abortion?


Babies don't get aborted. Fetuses do. The line between fetus and baby blurs over time, of course, which is why late term abortions are often banned while forms of birth control such as the morning after pill, which can in some cases can act as an abortifacient, are not. You again ignore such distinctions, whereas the whole reason for the debate lies in their existence.

juliat cung:
Banning something this big can be impossible if you think it's impossible but if you think possible it's always possible.


Banning it legally is certainly possible. Actually preventing it from happening is something else again. How do you stop a woman who is determined to have an abortion from finding some way of inducing one, or from finding a doctor willing to help her out despite the legal risks? And doesn't the very fact that these questions arise show that abortion is not, in fact, in the same category as murder, about which such questions do not arise?

Try rewriting this essay to address some of the concerns mentioned above, and see if you can't come up with a more thoughtful and nuanced defense of your thesis.




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