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'Yoga practice' - What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress?


bamboo 1 / 1  
Nov 12, 2012   #1
People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life. Some read; some exercise; others work in their gardens. What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress? Use specific details and examples to support your opinion.

(I've been practicing writing for my graduate school,please help me correct grammar or better syntax, Thank you so much!!!!!!)

In this rush era, people have to be multi-tasking to be able to meet with every social expectation. People no longer satisfied only with a successful career but also an appealing appearance, a wealthy social life, and a colorful lifestyle. What's more, with the advent of the Information age, the pervasive media drowned our sensations. All the reasons above increase tremendous strain to our life.

Unfortunately, the existence of stress is an inevitable reality. Appropriate amount of stress make oneself more motivated and more productive, but too much stress or a strong response to stress can have serious consequences. It's well-known trigger for depression and it can also cause such illness as ulcers and heart disease. So it is vital to find a way coping with stress. Stress reduction is a result of stress management. I, personally, am believed that Yoga practice- including breathing, posture, and meditation- is the best way to relieve pressure.

Through practicing Yoga posture, we are connecting our body and mind: when the body and mind are synchronized, we not only strengthen our muscle but also refresh our mind by gradually recognizing and extending our physical limitations. Additionally, facing stress with a deep breath brings us into the present, and provides clarity. It is an efficient way to take the mind away from mental worry by focusing on breathing. And by doing meditation, just sitting still and closing our eyes, will begin to calm the mind. Meditation is awareness of what is in the moment. Given time to reflect, we can set the negative feeling free.

Moreover, persistently practicing Yoga can also prepare for the future adversity- to develop the self-discipline and the mental habits to deal with an unexpected stress event. When bad things happened, it won't tremble our life, because we are already well prepared.

Managing stress is a critical lesson in our life. Through yoga we can learn to develop a greater awareness of our physical and psychological states. As a result, we are in a position to better manage our reactions to the thoughts, feelings and responses we have to the miscellaneous stress we deal with every day.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Nov 12, 2012   #2
People are no longer satisfied only with a successful career but also an appealing appearance, a wealthy social life, and a colorful lifestyle.

Your topic is about ways of reducing stress. Therefore you should quickly come to the topic. In this essay, you have consumed about one and half paras to describe stress and the reasons causing stress, which is , in my view, a bit too dragging and irrelevant to this essay. Instead you should address what the topic asks you ; what are the best ways of reducing stress? Use specific details and examples to support your opinion.

You should also provide specific examples to support your reasoning. For instance, in this essay you can tell about a person who is stress free by practicing yoga.


. Appropriate amount of stress makes oneself more motivated and more productive

It's a well-known trigger for depression and it can also cause such illnesses as ulcers and heart disease. So it is vital to find a way of coping with stress.

I, personally, am believed that Yoga practice- including breathing, posture, and meditation- is the best way to relieve pressure.
OP bamboo 1 / 1  
Nov 16, 2012   #3
dumi
Thank you for your advise. ^^
I try to revise, but it seems still a a little dragging...
well please help me see if it is better now.

In this rush era, most of us have to be multi-tasking to be able to meet with every social expectation, which requires continuous action and no rest. Since there is no time for rest and leisure, we move more and more away from ourselves and become more and more stressed. It is vital finding a way to manage stress in order to preventing overwhelming life strain becomes a threat to our health. I, personally, believe that Yoga practice- including breathing, posture, and meditation- is the best way to relieve pressure.

Stress reduction is a result of stress management. Yoga is a practical approach to develop self-management. Through practicing Yoga posture, we are connecting our body and mind: when the body and mind are synchronized, we not only strengthen our muscle but also refresh our mind. Additionally, facing stress with a deep breath brings us into the present quickly, which is a very efficient way to take the mind away from mental worry. By doing meditation, give us the time to reflect, we can set the negative feeling free or find the answer to our problem.

A recent study indicated that individuals who completed the yoga session had a 27 percent increase on average in GABA levels which is a brain chemical that has a generally calming, anti-anxiety effect within the brain. Through yoga we can learn to develop a relaxation skills that make us enable to adjust ourselves into a better physical and psychological states to fight with stress.

Managing stress is a critical lesson in our life. Yoga not only provides a way to get into shape physically, and also offers a holistic approach to coping with the miscellaneous stress of daily life.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Nov 17, 2012   #4
In this rush era, most of us have to be multi-tasking to be able to meet with every social expectation, which requires continuous action and no rest.

.... good opening and you have quickly set up the link and achieved alignment with the topic. Good! and a nice introduction : )

It's a good essay now; clear, factual and nicely presented : )
.... You have very good writing skills. Are you preparing for TOEFL or IELTS? If so, do more practice on possible topic and make posts to this forum. We would make our comments. The more you practice, the more you improve and be able to manage time at the exam!

Good Job!


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