Unanswered [6] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width Posts: 3


Write a two paragraphs, each describing a city in Syria. Then compare them.


mrxkms 3 / 5  
Apr 15, 2011   #1
Write a two paragraphs, each describing a city in Syria. Then compare then in one paragraph.

One of the most important cities and tourist attractions in Syria is Latakia. Latakia is a summer resort for all of the people of Syria, and also people from other countries. The city has many hotels, restaurant and cafes situated near the beach, which attract a lot of people who spend their holidays there, to enjoy the swimming and sailing. Many people prefer to go to Latakia environs, where the scenery is impressive and fantastic, and the beauty of nature is just amazing.

Aleppo is one of the oldest continuously inhabited cities in history. It is famous for its architecture, for its attractive churches, mosques, tombs and baths. It is also famous for its ancient citadel with medieval fortress, the great Umayyad mosque, and the extraordinary souqs (bazaars) with every kind of article for sale. Aleppo is famous for a love of eating. The city has a vast selection of different types of dishes.

Aleppo and Latakia are very famous for their history and tourist attractions. However each of which has something special that makes it distinctive from the other. Latakia is the city of beauty and nature. There are a lot of sceneries in Latakia that take your breath away. On the other hand, Aleppo is full of historic sites and it is very famous for its attractive architecture. What makes Aleppo so special is the Aleppine cuisine which is very rich of its multiple types of dishes.

So, visiting these two cities is unforgettable experience that makes you long to visit them every now and then.
cutie 1 / 2  
Apr 15, 2011   #2
One of the most important cities and tourist attractions in Syria is Latakia. Latakia is a summer resort for all of the people of Syria, and also people from other countries. The city has many hotels, restaurants and cafes situated near the beach, which attract a lot of people whoto spend their holidays there, to enjoy the swimming and sailing. Many people prefer to go to Latakia environs (Do you mean "enviroments"), where the scenery is impressive and fantastic, and the beauty of nature is just amazing.

Aleppo is one of the oldest continuously inhabited cities in history. It is famous for its architecture, for its attractive churches, mosques, tombs and baths. It is also famous for its ancient citadel with medieval fortress, the great Umayyad mosque, and the extraordinary souqs (bazaars) with every kind of article for sale. Aleppo is famous for a love of eating (Maybe you can use eating lover). The city has a vast selection of different types of dishes.

Aleppo and Latakia are very famous for their history and tourist attractions. However each of which has something special that makes it distinctive from the other. Latakia is the city of beauty and nature. There are a lot of sceneries in Latakia that take your breath away. On the other hand, Aleppo is full of historichistorical sites and it is very famous for its attractive architecture. What makes Aleppo so special is the Aleppine cuisine which is very rich of its multiple types of dishes.

So, visiting these two cities is unforgettable experience that makes you long to visit them every now and then.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 17, 2011   #3
Aleppo is famous for a love of eating (Maybe you can use eating lover).

I don't know if "eating-lover" would be right. I don't really like it. Actually, I like that sentence the way it is. But Cutie did a GREAT edit!! Do you have any questions about the edit?

Oh, also, I think historic is okay. Google historic and historical to see the difference.

However each of which them has something special that makes it distinctive from the other.

:-)

Great job! Practice typing these corrected sentences so you can learn the grammar as cutie taught you.


Home / Writing Feedback / Write a two paragraphs, each describing a city in Syria. Then compare them.
Writing
Editing Help?
Fill in one of the forms below to get professional help with your assignments:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳