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Write a paragraph about the differences between the city in the past and now.


mrxkms 3 / 5  
Apr 16, 2011   #1
Write a paragraph about the differences between the city in the past and now.

With Technology advancements and the increasing numbers of people, almost everything is continuously changing; few are the things that remained unchanged. The cities in which we live now are not the same as the cities that people used to live in 50 years ago. In the past, for example, there weren't a lot of buildings, there were just small buildings consisting of few floors. Crossing streets wouldn't take you a long time because of the passing cars. Public transportation was used by many people. In the past, green areas took most of the cities' territory. There were a lot of parks, green lands, open areas and playgrounds which played an important role for the city environment. However, cities now are not like they used to be. High buildings as well as the old low ones are everywhere consisting of office blocks, apartments, companies, schools and universities. The big number of vehicles is increasing every day. Private cars are parked here and there. We see green areas only within housing estates and residencies in additions to parks, squares and avenues. So, cities now seem very different from the cities in the past.
engwriting101 - / 23  
Apr 17, 2011   #2
With Technology advancements and the increasing numbers of peoplegrowing population , almost everything is continuously changing; few are the things that remained unchangedbeing too repetitive leave it out .

Crossing streets wouldn't take you a long time because of the passing cars.

Although this sentence is related to your topic it is an incomplete sentence

There were a lot of parks, green lands, open areas and playgrounds which played an important role for the city environment. However, cities now are not like they used to be.

Here you point out an issue/argument but you don't really address it. Give an example about why it was important for cities in the past to have parks and playgrounds. Then, explain why it may not be a good thing that there are fewer parks in the city now.

You need a little work organizing your ideas because you jump back and forth between them.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 19, 2011   #3
No need to capitalize "technology" in that first sentence.

With Technology technology advancements and the increasing numbers of people, almost everything is continuously changing; few are the things that remain unchanged. ------I changed it to "remain" but your way was okay, too.

You write very well with few errors! :-)

Private cars are parked here and there. We see green areas only within housing estates and residencies in additions addition to parks, squares and avenues so forth. So, cities now seem very different from the cities in the past.

Nice job!


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