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IELTS - Worldwide rubbish problem; Causes and Measures


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Topic: It is generally agreed that the amount of rubbish created by humans today is a worldwide problem. What do you think are the main causes of this situation? What measures can be uses to tackle the problem?

Nowadays, there had not been much of news, articles, and information about on how every individual can help preserve the planet Earth’s natural state form. As a result, majority of our world’s population are not aware of as little as a candy wrapper can bring up a rise of a global issue we face today. Daily garbage accumulates in one household, in every house of your community, in every city, to every country. Imagine how much rubbish we make everyday.

First, we must identify what the main causes are for this problem, and then suggest solutions that may benefit everyone involve. Obviously, the enlarging population in Earth is one of the main causes of this problem. We may not be able to halt everyone in conception; however, we still have the opportunity to educate ourselves. Massive production of non-recyclable item such as plastics is of one of the major causes too.

Majority of us are unaware of the said global issue. This should prompt the higher authorities to provide and implement an effective campaign on recycling. The use of media such as television advertisements, billboard ads, radio programs, newspaper ads, and many more about proper segregation and disposal of garbage contents will certainly help. As a matter of fact, promotion of “greener is better” campaign in grocery stores is brilliant. Some stores provide consumers paper bags instead of plastic bags whereas others encourage shoppers to bring their own recyclable grocery bags to reduce the use of plastic bags. Moreover, one not only save 5 cents, but also ultimately, save everyone from the harm of increasing rubbish may cause us.

Feb 7, 2013, 08:43pm   #2
phatz025:
Nowadays, there had not been much of news, articles, and information about on how every individual can help preserve the planet Earth’s in its natural state form.

Interesting writing style. Good intro :)
phatz025:
We may not be able to halt hold everyone in conception;

phatz025:
we still have the opportunity to educate ourselves.

How about this?
we still have the opportunity to make efforts to educate ourselves and others. .......... we should try to educate others as well and since you are supposed to talk about measures to arrest this problem,you need answer with a global perspective
Ok......... I can see you have excellent writing skills. So you can easily aim at a very good band. Now you need to pay attention to the essay structure. They expect you to write at least four paras including introduction, 2 body paras and conclusion.
Post your other practice essay to this forum and we'll provide you with comments :)
Feb 7, 2013, 10:20pm   #3
Nowadays, there had have not been much of news, articles, and information about on how every individual can help preserve the planet Earth’s natural state form. As a result, majority of our world’s population are not aware of that as little as a candy wrapper can bring up result a rise of a global issue we face today. Daily garbage accumulates in one household, in every house of your community, in every city, to every country. Imagine how much rubbish we make everyday.

You do not have a clear statement sentence. Try to figure one. For exp: I think the main cause of this unfavorable happenstance is the .....

First, we must identify what the main causes are for this problem, and then suggest solutions that may benefit everyone involve. Obviously, the enlarging population in Earth is the first main causes of this problem. We may not be able to halt everyone in conception; however, we still have the opportunity to educate ourselves. Massive production of non-recyclable item such as plastics is of one of the major causes too.

moreover, Majority of us are unaware of the said global issue.

You forgot the conclusion and I dont see any connection between your paragraphs.
dumi:
Now you need to pay attention to the essay structure. They expect you to write at least four paras including introduction, 2 body paras and conclusion.
Post your other practice essay to this forum and we'll provide you with comments :)



Thank you so much for your corrections! I had a very difficult time constructing that essay. I am just not used to writing essays. My exam will be on the 16th of February. Can you give me tips on how I to make conclusion paragraphs? Because it always seem to me that I am just repeating myself whenever I write conclusions. Thanks! :)
Feb 7, 2013, 11:46pm   #5
phatz025:
I am just not used to writing essays. My exam will be on the 16th of February. Can you give me tips on how I to make conclusion paragraphs? Because it always seem to me that I am just repeating myself whenever I write conclusions. Thanks! :)

Yes.............. Before coming to conclusion, I want to give you a few tips on the full structure;
Generally a 4 para essay would do ;
1. Introduction; Introduce the topic briefly ( you can get lots of help from the prompt & it's a matter of re-phrasing) and state your opinion very direct
2. Body para 1; First reason for your opinion + One specific example for that reason
3. Body para 2: Second reason + second example
4. Conclusion ; Sum up every thing you said above and re-instate your opinion.
So in this case your conclusion can be something like;
The accelerated growth in human population is the main reason for this global issue of severe growth in creation of rubbish. In my view, the best measure to arrest this issue is to build awareness among people about its seriousness and harmful effects to our environment and the world at large. Also they need to be educated on alternate options that help reduce the volumes of rubbish created daily. "Go green" concept can bring about much more good to the world if it is taken more seriously to our hearts.



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