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IELTS - Essay about woman's place in society


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Jul 13, 2012, 11:45am   #1
Some people believe in the traditional idea that the woman's place is in the home, while others say that idea is outdated and that women should play an increasingly important role in the workplace of the future. What is your opinion?

There have been strong arguments regarding women's place in the society in last decades. Some people advocate the opinion that women should stay home, and others who are against this theory, believe in women's significant roles in the future workplace.

The first group who are mostly from traditional backgrounds, believe that males are the one who must work out in the society. For example, in most developing countries, children should be brought up by their mothers and this is the fundamental duty which females have and they must spend rest of their lives as a full-time housewife. However, for example, some countries like Saudi Arabia are wealthy and most of families have traveled around the globe and are familiar to modern cultures, their females do not have the right to drive, let alone having a job and work eight-hours a day with male colleagues.

On the other hand, there are school of thoughts that are opposite the first group. They believe in women's potential as a part of the society which, not only they can participate in society as an employee, but also they can be more responsible in their positions than males. You can see this even in political roles, since Germany has elected Angela Merkel as a prime minister, they have turned to one of the most successful countries in economics in Europe.

In conclusion, I extremely believe in women's powers and potentials in order to make the Earth a better place for living. It is quite clear that parents should encourage their daughters from early years to participate in communities which will lead them to their bright and successful future.

Jul 13, 2012, 08:51pm   #3
There have been strong arguments regarding women's place in the society in the last decades. Some people advocate the opinion that women should stay home, and others who are against this theory, believe in women's significant roles in the future workplace.

The first group, who are mostly from traditional backgrounds, believe that males are the one who must work out in the society, while females stayed home. For example, in most developing countries, children should be are brought up by their mothers and this is the fundamental duty which females have and they who often must spend the rest of their lives as a full-time housewifes. However, for example, some countries like Saudi Arabia are wealthy and most of families have traveled around the globe and are familiar to modern cultures, their females do not have the right to drive, let alone having a job and work eight-hours a day with male colleagues. (I like that you are trying to give an example of a rich and modern country where women's right is encroached upon, but I feel that this does not contribute to the point of this paragraph.)

On the other hand, there are school of thoughts that are opposite the first group. They there are others who believe in women's potential as a part of the society. which, not only they can participate in society as an employee, but also they can Some even argue that women can be more responsible in their positions than males. You can see this even in political roles, since Germany has elected Angela Merkel as a prime minister, they have turned to one of the most successful countries in economics in Europe. (Try a different example, the assertion you are trying to make is too strong and unsupported)

In conclusion, I extremely believe in women's powers and potentials in order to make the Earth a better place for living (statement is phrased awkwardly). It is quite clear that parents should encourage their daughters from early years to participate in communities, which will lead them to their bright and successful future(s).

You introduced your opinion very well by showing us the two opposing arguments, however I want to hear more about what you think. After all, that's what the question is asking. Be careful with matching singular nouns with singular verbs, and plural nouns with plural verbs. This is a good start.
Jul 14, 2012, 06:21am   #4
Thank you Peter. I guess you're right. I have written the essay again.



Some people believe in the traditional idea that the woman's place is in the home, while others say that idea is outdated and that women should play an increasingly important role in the workplace of the future. What is your opinion?


There have been strong arguments regarding women's place in society in the last decades. Some people advocate the opinion that women should stay home, and others who are against this theory, believe in women's significant roles in the future workplace.

The first group who are mostly from traditional backgrounds, believe that males must work while females stayed home. For example, in most developing countries, children are brought up by their mothers who often spend rest of their lives as a full-time housewives. Also, for instance, many countries in middle-east are wealthy and most of families have traveled around the globe and are familiar to modern cultures. However, their females do not have their initial rights of participating in social activities, let alone having a career and work along with male colleagues.

On the other hand, there are others who believe in women's potential as a part of society. Some even argue that women not only have the abilities to work alongside men, but also can be more useful and prosper in comparison with males. You can see this in advanced countries since women have got the equal rights like men to become a part of social life. In fact, these countries have increased their human resources which is resulted in developed workplaces.

In conclusion, I extremely believe in women's powers and potentials. It is quite clear that parents should encourage their daughters from early years to participate in communities which will lead them to their bright and successful futures. Moreover, governments should pass some rules to abolish the laws that are against females initial rights.
Jul 15, 2012, 08:26am   #5
There have been strong arguments regarding women's place in society in the last decades. Some people advocate the opinion that women should stay home, and while others who are against this theory, believe in insist on women's significant roles in the future workplace.

The first group who are, mostly from traditional backgrounds, believe hold the view that males must work while females stayed home. For example, in most developing countries, children are brought up by their mothers who often spend rest of their lives as a full-time housewives. Also, for instance,Even in many wealthy middle-east countries in middle-east are wealthy and where most of families have traveled around the globe and are familiar to modern cultures. However, their females do not have their initial rights of participating in social activities, let alone having a career and working along with male colleagues.

On the other hand, there are others who believe in women's potential as a part of society. Some even argue that women not only have the abilities to work alongside men, but also can be more useful and prosper in comparison with males. You can see this in advanced countries since where women have got the equal rights like men to become a part of social life. In fact, these countries have enlarged their workforce as a result of women working. increased their human resources which is resulted in developed workplaces.

In conclusion, I extremely firmly believe in women's powers and potentials. It is quite clear that parents should encourage their daughters from early years to participate in communities which will lead them to their abright and successful futures. Moreover, governments should pass some rules to abolish the laws that are against females' initial rights.



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