Gilchrist, I marked the suggestions in blue. Comments are in green. This is a highly improved paper with only minor corrections and editing needed :-)
When I went to Thailand for a school service summer trip, I experienced a culture totally different from what I was used to. This seem very adventurous to me
- I was feeling adventurous when I joined our school service trip to Thailand.- There are times when you can combine 2 themes in your introduction. This is an example of that.After seeing the way Thai people live, I've learned to value anything or opportunity i have and to make the best out of it.
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... I've learned to value all opportunities and material things that I have. I also learned to make the best out of what I have in life.I ate it as fast as a bullet and then I threw it all up when I finished.
- I ate my food in a flash and threw up just as fast.In Thailand we had 3 meals a day and snack or sometimes desert in between meals.[ /quote]
- ... meals a day plus snacks and dessert in between meals.
[quote=Gilchrist2014]it always contained all the classes of food and is naturally grown.
- ... contained all the food groups...It then that we met an 80 year old woman
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was then...
Encountering all these culture clashes, I was still very pleased with the hospitality Thai people showed us.
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Regardless of the culture clashes...
On our last morning therebefore we left ,
build a house for anything and construction land is very expensive
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build a house for anyone...Houses are constructed by companies or the government. In Thailand, land is cheaper and one has to build their own house to live in
- The statement about your sister not having to build houses for anyone is more relevant.America will be a better place.
- ... better place if the citizens could do that.It expanded my knowledge of how different parts of the world are and as a person
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and helped me grow as a person.The best one week of my life.
- It was the best week of my life.