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Water is the most common element for ordinary people; A paragraph about water


api 1 / 1  
Nov 13, 2009   #1
please help me in my first paragraph

Water, the most common element for ordinary peple,but it was an invisible thorn for me .it ever infuse and ingrain in my mind and certainly prompte the nightmare that ...
virak 1 / 3  
Nov 14, 2009   #2
hi! guy your paragraph writing is good because you gave detail imformation relate with your life. However, some sentences I'm not really understand well. I'm sorry!!!
rmli 7 / 10  
Nov 15, 2009   #3
Water is the most common element for ordinary peple,but it was an invisible thorn for me .it ever infuse and ingrain in my mind and certainly prompte the nightmare that had accompanied me for many years. It was a sad story, that occured on a Sunday in 1997, March, distinctly showing that in the calender,rather rather than boring for doing nothing at home, my sincere friend and I had made ourself "homelesshouseless " by swimming in the river. It was approximately 2 kilometers from my house, we were both exhilarating there, with the joy radiating from the bottom of our heart. Perhaps the angle's wing was not hovering over us ,as the unprecedented torrential down pour was happened so abruptly and dramatically. We swam rapidly towards the bank, at that critical moment, my friend suddenly suffer for the muscle cramp. I had tried to help him , but failed. The personal witness of lossing a friend is my long time anguish and such expierence can still be i can still recalled it vividly in my mind .while it haunts in my mind unintentionally. Each time I remreber it I cann't help my tears , and smeare away with the my broken heart that suffered from the misery, sorrow, agony and excrutiating pain as my solemn appeal to the Almighty, did not success.Times passes with the blink of an eyes, however water is still a dread for me, but it is the basic element that play an important role in our life and spurs basic resources of the rapid development of our civilization.
OP api 1 / 1  
Nov 15, 2009   #4
thanks for helping me!


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