One of the main problems that contributes to the severe troubles is
that violent movies make people neglected .
Recently, most
of people suppose that the high rates of violent scenes are leading to detrimental community issues .
This problem , among others , will be discussed hereafter, and methods which can reduce them will be given .
Delete this. Instead of writing this way, express your opinion. It is not presented in your introduction.To begin with , there are three factors
that bringbringingabout the consequence of violent films .[/quote]
First of all , v iolent films made people
Moreover , Violent movies
violent
Due to the fact that , Youngsters are not mature enough
youngsters
For example , If the government
if
If the government remove
sthe violent scenes in movies
Beside , Parents should have a discipline
parents
Beside, parents shouldimpose discipline in their homeIn conclusion , while there are many issues aringing as a consequence of the increasing amounts of violence in movies,(use comma instead of period). I believe that the best way to solve that problems is education . Hence , People will understand that violence is unacceptable and they will not mimic it .
The italic part should be combined as one. They are not separate sentences.Good luck:)