Due to the development of tourism, more and more traditional culture districts are opened
to tourists, which has triggered a hot debate. Some people think that the traditional culture is destroyed while others
claim that the traditional culture could be protected by using it as money making attractions. Personally, I believe that
moderate opening of traditional culture sites to tourists is an effective way to protect the local culture.
Admittedly, taking the traditional culture sites as money-earning machine would absolutely destroy the traditional culture to some extent. how? support your opinion.
It is obvious that the vicious cycle would happen without reasonable management and control
along with the arrival of increasing tourists, so that
not only the environment of traditional culture districts would be destroyed, but also dissatisfactions and conflicts would be produced. why?
- There are not a few of such cases from the current reports or news. - this paragraph contains mere statement that does not adress your reason properly
However, we can not deny the functions and effects of opening them to the public. Most important of all is that it is the most effective to protect the culture itself, since
only when the culture is known and spread by the common people, will it have a long life span. Besides that, another effect that cannot
be ignored is the economic income; the traditional culture building could be renovated and protected better by using them. - place each reason separately in independent paragraphs and then develop them
Personally, I think it is wise to more effective way to allow the tradition culture to be open to the public, but what I think is the most important is that the aim of opening it to the public should be spread and protect culture while not to earn money. - rephrase your conclusion.
Personally, I repute that the most effective way to preserve culture for the future generations and promote it as a part of country's image is to make it open to the public. - something like this. you can make it larger by stating once again your reasons
[i]If you consider that culture should be opened to world then place the third paragraph, before the second. the pargraph containing the contrary idea cannot be larger that the the one where you support your point of view