please grade me out of 6
This is either a 3 or a 4. It's a perfect split.
If the right readers were to get it, you'd score a four.
The mechanical quality of your writing (grammar, syntax, punctuation, vocabulary, and usage) is a four, maybe even a five.
However, there are far more important factors than these. The biggest problem is that this essay is
very repetitive. That will turn a four or a five into a three in no time.
This looks to be right around 500 words, but you could have written about 350 words without sacrificing any content at all.