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The universities should keep the doors open to all and students need to get equal chance in studying


Far 2 / 1 1  
May 27, 2015   #1
While the battle of male and female has been heard about for a long time, nowadays it looks desperately old fashioned. In today's societies men and women benefit from the same opportunities in almost every fields and the education as such. In my opinion preventing the women or men attending the university classes, even in some specific subjects, could be considered as an evident for the freedom violation in the progressive countries.

The arguments of the supporters of not giving the equal chances to male and female in education are made based on the differences in their biological abilities and the spirituals as well. These fans of -what I call- "sexual unparallelism", emphasizing on the emotional nature of women and the, so called, rational characteristics of men, try to categorize the university fields to feminine and masculine; such a wasteful effort which has been proved to be baseless by the number of women managed to thrive as scientists and the men as successful cuisines! So I think this is the matter of "preference and interest" rather than lack of ability.

Even if we accept the claims on priority of one sex on another in studying specific university subjects, still this is the person who should choose his way while I believe that this is not merely him who benefits from equal chances. In the light of taking into account the other half of the society's talents, enormous number of novel ideas, inventions and developments would come into appearance, which would have been dwindled under the shadow of dogmatism.

Concluding aforementioned arguments, I think that being aware of natural differences between female and male, the universities should keep the doors open to all walks of life. The students should be given the equal chance in studying whatever subject they opt to in order to make their personal talents fostered in a preferred way.
Trias 23 / 41 14  
May 27, 2015   #2
Hi @far, please find my feedback below.

While theThe battle of male and female has been heardoccuring about for a long time, although nowadays it looks desperately old fashioned. In today's societies men and women benefit from the same opportunities in almost every fields and the education as such. In my opinion, preventing the women or men attending the university classes, even only in some specific subjects, couldshould be considered as an evident for the a freedom violation in the progressive countries.

ThesS tudents should be given the equal chance in studying whatever subject they opt tofor in order to make their personal talents fostered in asuch preferred way.

Good luck!
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Jun 12, 2015   #3
- ...could be considered as an evidentevidencefor theof freedom violation in the progressive countries.

- Even if we accept the claims on priority of one sexgender on another in studying specific university subjects,

- still this is the person who should choose his way while I believe that this is not merely him whofor his benefits from equal chances.

- In the light of taking into account the other half of the society's talents, enormous number of novel ideas, inventions and developments would come into appearanceto surface , which would have been dwindled under the shadow of dogmatism.

Far, I have made a few corrections. I guess what I can add to your essay is that, gender equality has always been a topic that people will never win.

It's an idea that will always be accounted for, may it be a talk in the office, a speech or even a sit down with friends.

Gender equality is one action that should be taken seriously and if we make it happen, I would like to say that the world will be a better place but there's a lot more than gender equality but at least it will help ease the current world situation.

Now, going back to your essay. I think it's good, however, proof read your essay all the time so you can further your essay.

Keep writing

Cheers!!!


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