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"an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside" - Your last summer holiday.


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Sep 6, 2011, 12:54pm   #1
It was an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside to visit my grandparents last summer holiday. My family decided to go by bike on this trip because we all wanted to enjoy the atmosphere there. As expected, the air was so great and clear. We felt very excited about this place. After having lunch at my grandparents' house, we took a short nap and made all preparation to go fishing with grandparents in the afternoon. The lake beside the house has many fishes and we had a joyful fishing and a lot of dishes cooked with in the evening. It was our first day.
On the second day, we got up early and drove bicycle around the village. The traffic was not heavy of course. We went along the small roads, had lunch under the shade of an old tree and saw the children play with kites in the afternoon. The wind made us feel relaxed and peaceful.
On the third day, dad and mom allowed my sister and I to help my grandparents with the works on the fields. The summer comes, either the harvest does. People are more busy to collect all corns and rices. We had a hard- working day. We went to sleep early and the village at night was so silent.
It was such a memorable travel of mine, we felt very happy during the after time of that summer, and all sorrow was disappeared!


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This is a short essay with about 15 sentences written "to describe your last summer holiday" with simple words and grammars.

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Sep 7, 2011, 04:00pm   #2
Hello! It's nice to have you back!

My family and I decided to go by bike on this trip because we all wanted to enjoy the atmosphere there.

We felt very excited about this place.---What was the place called? You should mention it here.

After having lunch at my grandparents' house, we took a short nap and made all preparations to go fishing with grandparents them in the afternoon.

The lake beside the house has many fishes, and we had a joyful time and a lot of dishes cooked with the fish in the evening.

That was our first day.

On the second day, we got up early and rode bicycles around the village.

On the third day, dad and mom allowed my sister and I to help my grandparents with the work in the fields.

The summer comes, either the harvest does.---This sentence is not right. Should it say, 'the harvest comes after the summer, perhaps? It's just the word 'either' that doesn't belong.

People are very busy to collecting all corns and rices.

We had a day full of hard work.

It was such a memorable holiday of mine, we felt very happy during the after time rest of that summer, and all sorrow had disappeared!

What a beautiful essay! Glad to have you back with us!

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Sep 8, 2011, 02:35am   #3
Thanks for your corrections and your kind words. :-)
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