Hei there! :D
I made some corrections to your essay. I think you should first of all focus on finding more solid arguments, you're not really convincing. Not that you are wrong, but your statements leave a lot of space for doubt.
There have been many technological breakthroughs in communication such as the
telephone or the
they can show and see each others' emotions
First, face-to-face communication helps
recognize the attitude of
others towards you.The h
uman being is so complex that one can express her emotion and attitude by using hundreds of
kinds of facial expressions
They can show you what they feel about you by moving their eyebrows
smiling... Let us say for example, you are telling jokes at a party(I'm not sure if it's that good to use "let us", ... but I have no other idea).
You can infer
from people's faces that you are not very good at making people laugh(whether your joke was a good one or not.)
. Therefore, you can adjust your behaviors properly before you make fun(/a fool out)
of yourself. However, if you use e-mail or instant messages, you simply see texts and it is very hard to know if the others are willing to communicate with you.[Yeah, but no. There are a lot of people who do not realise when they exaggerate and this might also be due to the fact that so many people are capable of hiding their true emotions and thoughts. And I'd like to contradict you on the mail and IM matter. It is usually very clear when someone doesn't want to talk to you. For example when during an IM-conversation one will not use smileys or punctuation marks he/she is usually angry or doesn't want to talk. Usually delayed answers indicate the same thing. Mail ... mail is so formal, so cold, that people only use it to talk about work and other serious matters.]
Besides, face-to-face communication can help you reflect on
yourself a lot.
During a discussion
, eye contact, posture and speech can show a person's confidence, persistence, ability and determination to win the debate
. -- I seriously doubt that the posture of a person will show me their abilities. Look at politicians. They all have a respectable posture, they all make eye contact confidently and they all have perfect speeches. Their abilities? You tell me.
are pretty different terms. A discussion doesn't automatically imply a challenge between two or more dialogue partners.
That is a reason why world conferences are not held online. -- This is great!!!
from who represent
in addition to use logical arguments and persuasive language to present their opinions(this sentence should be reorganised to make more sense)
they also hence taking(/exploiting)
the advantages of face-to-face communication.
In summation, during a conversation or a meeting, the most important aspect is that people understand each others' emotions
, attitude and feelings, and only face-to-face communication can provide this unique feature. -- Hm, and businessmen too? You think they care about each others emotions and feelings? Or UN-representatives? Do you think their personal
thoughts on a matter count? No, sir. The most important aspect of any communication in general is that the information reaches the receptor unharmed, unchanged. In this case, face-to-face interaction has indeed it's advantages by either facilitating this transfer or even by augmenting that certain information.