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The table reveals information regarding the underground railways system in six big cities


intiaiqbal92 13 / 13 2  
Apr 23, 2015   #1
The take below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The table reveals information regarding the data of underground railways system in six big cities across the world. In general, as can be seen from the table that there are six big cities : London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto, and Los Angeles which have used underground railways system. Then, it can be seen that the three oldest underground system are larger and serve significantly more passengers than the newer system.

To begin with, London has the oldest underground railways system among the six major cities. It was opened in the year 1863 . Paris was the second oldest which it was opened in 1900. Then, this is followed by the opening of the railway systems in Tokyo, Washington DC and Kyoto. Los Angeles has the newest underground railway system, and it was opened in 2001. In terms of the size of the railway systems, London has the largest underground railway systems. It had 394 kilometres of route which is nearly twice as large as the system in Paris. Kyoto, in contrast, has the smallest system, it only has 11 kilometres of route.

Surpraisingly, Tokyo, which only has 155 kilometres of route, it also has the greatest number of passengers per year, at 1927 millions passengers. Thus, Paris has the second greatest number of passengers, at 1191 millions passengers per year. The smallest underground railway system, Kyoto, has the smallest number of passengers per year.



lcturn87 - / 435 236  
Apr 23, 2015   #2
In the second sentence of the first paragraph, you can add a comma after table and delete the word "that". Throughout the paper when you write about more than one city use "Underground railway systems." If you use only talk about one city you can use underground railway system. Check this throughout the paper.

Ex: Six big cities (you would use underground railway systems); London (underground railway system); Kyoto and Paris (underground railway systems).

In the second paragraph, you use railways. You can change it to railway. When you compare the date Paris opened, place a comma after "which" and delete, "it was" from this sentence. Remember the example above when you mention London you have to say system. (Great job with these comparisons!)

In the third paragraph, you misspelled a word. Change the first word to, 'Surprisingly". Also, delete the word "it" in this sentence. I would say millions of passengers in this paragraph.

There were few errors. Good Job!


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