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TRAVELLING ABROAD & REASON FOR TRAVEL (IELTS TASK1)


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Feb 28, 2013, 06:08am   #
The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of
100,000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travelled for the period
1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. IELTS TASK
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These charts illustrate the visits abroad by UK residents by purpose of visits and destination of visits abroad by main region in 1994-1998.

There are some visit purposes was shown in the first chart such as holiday,business,visit to friends and relatives and other reasons.However,there was a decline in the amount of visitors but independently of purposes there was steady increase in visiting abroad about from 22.072 in1994 to 28.828 in 1998.Besides,the visits on business have increased regularly:while it was about 3.155 in 1994,but in 1998 this figure totalled 3.639.One of main reasons is visit to friends and relatives which has increased over the period from 2.689 in1994 to 3.051 in 1998.Similarly ,the visits on other reasons has also shown growth from 982 to 1.054 over the proper years.

In addition,the second chart illustrates destination of visits by main regions which shows us that the majority of visitors prefer to go Western Europe (about from 19.371 in 1994 to 24.519 in 1998) compared with North America (around from 919 to 1.823) and other regions (approximately from 1.782 to 2.486 )over the same period of time.

Totally,I would like to emphasize that globalization affects to the amount of visits between countries therefore it seems it will continue to increase in the future.





Feb 28, 2013, 08:35am   #
In this task you need to summarize and report the main features and make comparisons where relevant. So you need to have a reporting tone when you write;
orkhan:
These charts illustrate the visits abroad by UK residents by purpose of visits and destination of visits abroad by main region in 1994-1998.

The charts illustrate the number of visits abroad made by UK residents during the period of 1994 -1998 by purpose and destination.
orkhan:
There are some visit purposes that are was shown in the first chart such as holiday,business,visit to friends and relatives and other reasons.
.............. This needs improvement! Also it's better you start describing the most obvious observations rather than describing the parameters;
Overall, it can be observed that "Holiday" has been the main purpose of travel during this period.
You can get some idea by reading these samples;
www.ielts-exam.net/academic_writing_samples_task_1/715/



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