'Travel is the thing, that makes you richer' - Semester at Sea Essay

I havent thought of a title yet but let me know

Semester at Sea Essay
One of my favorite quotes is, "Travel is the only thing that you can buy, that makes you richer." This quote is significant to my life in multiple ways. I was raised and born in a family of four about an hour outside of Philadelphia. One would say my upbringing was very conservative and fulfilled the stereotype of the "American Dream" lifestyle. After spending 18 years in the same house and the same small town, I left to attend school in Cincinnati, OH which is over 500 miles away. This transition in my life instilled a fire inside of me. A fire to see what the world has to offer, a fire to completely immerse myself in culture and history and a fire that could only be put out by learning, doing and seeing. My global perspective has only been shaped by what I've been taught in school. The information I have learned is not sufficient enough for me. I want to see first hand how other cultures live their day to day lives. I want to completely immerse myself in the history and the art of places I've always dreamed of traveling to. I believe that the best way of learning is to experience it and to do it for your self. By traveling to twelve different countries, it will allow me to develop awareness of my own culture through comparison and contrast with other cultures. I will get the chance to broaden my education and broaden my perspective by not only gaining information that educates my awareness, but by seeing how other people view the world also. These experiences will allow me to form my own views and opinions on the world. As a marketing major the ability to see what other people need and want will help me immensely. Through observing different cultures I will learn how other people outside of the U.S. live and by observing their markets and trends, I will gain knowledge that I wouldn't be able to learn in a classroom.

This trip will not only fulfill my dreams of traveling and learning other cultures but I will get the opportunity to fulfill one of my passions, philanthropic work. Poverty is a topic we all hear about and have learned about, but not many have witnessed it. By visiting a place such as Ghana, I will be able to gain insight on the alarming conditions that are actually taking place there. By seeing this poverty first hand it will make me want to make a difference and do service projects. Understanding how extreme poverty is, is critical in building connections to those who have been in similar situations. To witness these conditions will definitely widen my global perspective and awareness. Semester at Sea will provide me with life long knowledge and experiences that will make a positive impact on my life and who I am. My dream is to fully immerse myself into many different cultures to broaden my view on the world and I think Semester at Sea is the perfect way to fulfill that dream of mine. The fire that I have inside to learn, see and do can only be extinguished through this opportunity.

I think the number of your family members is irrelevant.

you have repeated your idea. and i barely see a structure here. try to make at least 3 paragraphs. Here i can see that, you can divide this in to 4 paragraphs.

Paragraph 1 - Hook, paraphrased prompt, and your view. ( i think you have given a interesting hook here, but your prompt is not clear)
Paragraph 2 - start it from here "This transition in my life instilled a fire inside of me..."
Paragraph 3 -
Paragraph 4 - conclusion "Semester at Sea will provide me ...."

I hope this is helpful, anyway this is only my opinion, as i am a student, i could be wrong :)
on the other hand i really felt your urge to travel :)

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