Writing task 2 : Traffic congestion and pollution on atmosphere

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

what other measures do you think might be effective?

Increasing traffic on the road and pollution on the atmosphere become enormous problems. For this reason, a straight solution should be taken to deal with those problems such controlling the amount of petrol. While as far as I am concerned, it will be viable solution, I firmly believe that other solutions may become priory solution for those cases.

As a matter of fact, controlling the amount of gasoline in societies consumption exerts an influence decreasing both of the problems.
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As a matter of fact, controlling the amount of gasoline in societies consumption exerts an influence decreasinginfluential reduction of both of the problems. Result shows that 80 per cent of hectic traffic on the road lead the increasing of pollution on the atmosphere such as spending a long time due to traffic jam on traffic light. As it can be seen on fact, managing the gasoline will narrow amount of problems down to decrease significantly.

Furthermore, increasing the price of petrol is not only to decrease traffic on the road or pollution, but also governmentsthe government*if you mean for plural form, you should only use the government will have cost effective with their budget. For instance, in 2014 Indonesian government decided to decline the amount of gasoline in societies that can be affected people changing their lifestyle from using private vehicles to come up with using bicycle. Thus, it will be a straight solution to the government or some stakeholder create an effectiveness controlling their budget for other problems except traffic or pollution.

On the other hand, there are measurements that might be an effective solution to tackle them. Firstly, limiting the number of vehicles production from big companies. It can affect the percentage of user vehicles decrease dramatically which is followed by the amount of pollution. Second of all, giving education to societies about both of problems can lead people to know the important of life without traffic congestion and pollution. As a consequence, people have a better life with healthy life without pollution stress due to traffic jam.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although controlling petrol consumption on citizen is to yield people having a better livelife , those cannot be a viable solution if all of stakeholders such government and citizen do not pay more attention to deal with them.