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IELTS Writing-Topic about TV, book, radio


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Jun 6, 2010, 07:25am   #1
Writing Task:
Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for
communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective.
Comics, Books, Radio, Television, Film, Theatre
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own
knowledge or experience.


The civilization of our human beings has developed for a long time with the help of the science and technology. Nowadays, people can communicate information through various mediums such as book, radio and television and so on. These three mediums are the most popular ones that we are using everyday and almost can not live without them.
Book is the conventional media for people to spread the information and it has been existing for thousands years. People can get huge amount of knowledge, predecessors' experience and historical lessons from books. However, in the current time, book seems to be out of date, because it always takes a long time on editing, printing and publishing. Therefore, it can not catch up the latest changes all around the world.
In order to meet the information explosion now, radio, a kind of electronic wave technology, came into our daily life. It is affordable for almost everyone and can pass the information among people in just few seconds. On the other hand, it has its own limitation. People can hear things through radio, but sometimes language can not explain things that such clear and some audience could misunderstand the content maybe just cause of missing one word.
Thus, TV was invented. Television can solve most of the misunderstandings and also help people get information not only through sound but also the vision. This is a real good medium to communicate information, but unfortunately some new problems are raised on this communication platform such as too much violent program, too much advertisement etc. All these kind of information should be well controlled to the younger generation.
All in all, compared with other tow medias, I believe that TV is the most effective one for communicating information.

Your suggestions and any idea on my writing will be appreciated! I really need you help! Thanks ever so much!

The civilization of our - what do you imply to by using our? Human beings do not belong to anybody.- human beings has developed for a long time with the help of the science and technology. Nowadays, people can communicate information through various mediums such as books, radio and television, and so on. These three mediums are the most popular ones that we are using everyday and almost cannot live without them.

A book - you cannot use a countable noun without article. I advise you to use the plural form of the word "book" in this paragraph, as it sounds better and is more convenient - is the conventional medium for people to spread the information, and it has been existing for thousands years. People can get huge amount of knowledge, predecessors' experience and historical lessons from books. However, in the current time, books seems to be out of date, because they always takes a long time for editing, printing and publishing. Therefore, it cannot catch up the latest changes all around the world.

On the other hand, it has its own limitation. People can hear things through radio, but sometimes the language can not explain things that such clearly and some audience can misunderstand the content maybe just because of missing one word.

Thus, TV was invented. Television can solve most of the misunderstandings and also help people get information not only through the sound but also the vision. This is a really good medium to communicate information, but unfortunately some new problems are raised on this communication platform such as too much many violent programs, too much many advertisements etc. All these kinds of information should be well controlled to the younger generation.
All in all, compared with other tow - this word does not match its place- medias, I believe that TV is the most effective one for communicating information.

You should expand on the last paragraphs, by repeating your reasons; it is too short. Add few supportive sentences to the para devoted to television, as you in favour of it. The reasons that you brought there for its effectiveness are not completely persuasive.
Jun 7, 2010, 02:03am   #3
Thanks a lot for you comment, Azeri. I think now I have some rough idea about my writing. I will give out next one or two in this week and I will fix some silly problems I have. Anyway, I hope you may give more ideas on my following writings! That's really apreciated!

Jet
Jun 7, 2010, 06:11am   #4
Hi Jet,

In my openion, starting with the word civilization is compatable with mentioning some historical facts about inventions of Radio and TV. This way is helpfull in order to expand your paragraphs by finding more persuasive reasons to support your choice as Azeri adviced you above.

Regards,
The Civilization our human beings has developed for a long time with the help of the science and technology. Nowadays, people can communicate information through various mediums media, such as books, radios, televisions and so on. --- You have 4 items on the list: books, radios, televisions, and so on. The "and" goes before "so on." :-)

These three [/s]media are the most popular ones; we are using them every day and almost cannot live without them. (add a sentence to tell your answer to their question, and then end the first paragrah).

Paragraph 2:
Book is the conventional media for people ...

All these kinds of information should be [s]well
controlled and kept away from the younger generation.


:-)



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