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Do you think we should pay attention to the famous people opinions?


vaishali1980 26 / 83  
Jul 6, 2010   #1
Nowadays, everybody wants to show their intelligence in their master area. People become famous in their dominant area by outstanding performance. Consequently, other people wanted to listen their opinion or follow them. I agree with the statement, 'when famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, we should pay attention to those opinions'. There are many reasons I believe that the people should pay attention to famous people's opinion.

The first reason is famous people's intellectuality. Celebrity are definitely different from ordinary people. They have talent and they are ingenious and wise. Most of the them give their opinion in their expert area. If they don't have sufficient knowledge about a problem, they like to keep quite. I believe that when famous people give some opinions about problem, its a reality, instead of fake. There are also some exceptions like politicians. Political leaders are always famous and most of time they lie. We can't believe them because they reveal truth for their personal benefits. Other than politician, famous people like Sachin Tendulker, Amitabh Batchen, Amir Khan, we can trust them blindly and consider their opinion in major aspects.

The second reason is the importance these people give for their honor. They get respects a lot and they wouldn't want to loose their honor. Let us consider the example of Kapil Dev - a famous cricketer. Some players tried to involve him in charges of corruption. As he had said earlier, his innocence was proves after investigation and his name was cleared of all corruption charges Famous people do not want to be associated with dishonest. They try to cooperate in giving out correct information. Some times politician takes disadvantage of their honor. Political leader brings famous people as a face of the party to interact with the voters in an election.

Additionally, famous people give more trps for success to newcomers, as they learn from their experience, hard work and mistake. We should take their advice in the area of their expertise.

In conclusion, famous people are intelligence and having master in their field, we should listen to their opinion in their skill. As well as we should considered their opinion depends on person, ability and ideas how they are elaborate.
vrajveer89 8 / 21  
Jul 7, 2010   #2
Consequences, other people wanted to listen their opinion or follow them

Consequently/As a result , other people want to listen to their opinion or follow them.

I agree that the statement

I agree with the statement

Famous people is definitely different

Famous people are definitely different

They have talent and they are genius and wisdom.

They have the talent and are ingenious and wise

I believe that when famous people give some opinions about problem

I believe that when they give their opinion about a problem

There are also some exception like politician

There are also some exceptions like politicians

Political leaders always famous and most of time they tell lie

Political leaders are always famous and most of time they tell lie.

The second reason is honor for famous people

The second reason is the importance these people give for their honor.

We give so much respect to the famous people. They don't want to loose their honor

They are respected a lot and they wouldn't want to lose their honor.

As example, Kapil Dev, he is a famous cricketer. Some players tried to involve him in corruption. He exposed the corruption. As he said earlier, he was innocent, after investigation its cleared that I was really innocent and not involved in any corruption.

Let us consider the example of Kapil Dev - a famous cricketer. Some players tried to involve him in charges of corruption. He exposed the corruption. As he had said earlier, his innocence was proves after the investigation and his name was cleared of all corruption charges.

Famous people don't want dishonest. They tries to give correct and appropriate information.

Famous personalities do not want to be associated with dishonesty. They try to cooperate in giving out accurate information.

Some times politician takes disadvantage of their honor. Political leader brings famous people as a idle model in election, to interact voter's.

Some times politicianstakeundue advantage of their honor. Political leaders bring famous people as the face of the party to interact with the voters in an election .

In additionally, famous people give more trips for success to newcomers,

Additionally , famous people give more tips for success to newcomers,

We should take their advice on their master area.

We should take their advice in the area of their expertise

In conclusion, though famous people are intelligent and having master is their field, we should listen their opinion in their master field.

In conclusion, though famous people are intelligent and have mastery in their field, we should listen to their opinion in their master field.

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Just make sure you don't confuse between fame and expertise. There are many cases where experts are not necessarily famous and likewise famous personalities are not necessarily experts.

You make use of 'famous people' too often in your write-up. Try using pronouns wherever possible.

You also have quite a few grammatical mistakes in your work. Try to work on them.

Cheers
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OP vaishali1980 26 / 83  
Jul 7, 2010   #3
Thanks vrajeev89

You always give good suggestion.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 8, 2010   #4
I think this sounds better:
...in their master areas of expertise.

Use the plural form:
Celebrity Celebrities are definitely different from ordinary people.

Respect should have no s on the end, unless it is being used as a verb.
Also, "Loose" means not tight. Lose is the word you need:
They get respects respect a lot, and they wouldn't want to loose lose their honor.

:-)

In conclusion, famous people are intelligent in the sense that they have achieved mastery in their fields, so we should listen to their opinions and appreciate their skill. Additionally, we should consider their opinions based on their personalities, abilities, and how they present themselves.


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