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Is television a dangerous influence on teenagers behavior? (Argumentative Essay)


pulkit9999 1 / 1  
Sep 5, 2011   #1
Hello,

I have written a little bit about "Is television a dangerous influence on teenagers behavior?" but i wanted to know more. Anyways how is it and how can i improve it.

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Television is one of the greatest inventions ever. Over the past few decades it has evolved a lot from black and white to colored , from 2d to 3d. Earlier there used a limited content on the television whereas now there is a lot. At present television broadcast a lot of stuff which is not recommended for teenager to watch but we can not stop it. Like we have heard a lot of times that "We Do What We See" we can say if one watches something bad or unadvised on the television , one would do the same! So i strongly believe that its not the television but its the content on it which influences the teenagers behavior....
Bobur 5 / 29  
Sep 5, 2011   #2
Television is one of the greatest inventions ever. Over the past few decades it has evolved a lot from black and white to colored , from 2d (dimensional) to 3d. Earlier there used a limited content on the television whereas now there is a lot( broaden it by giving examples) . At present television broadcasts a lot of stuff which is not recommended for teenager to watch but we can not stop it. Like we have heard a lot of times that "We Do What We See" we can say if one watches something bad or unadvised on the television , onehe or she would ill do the same! So i strongly believe that its not the television but its the content on it which influences the teenagers behavior....

ahmm... okay. You are talking about the things that we are already familiar with, let's show those impacts from a different angle.

1. Physical influence -> e.g a lack of exercises -> show results -> your opinion about a possible solution
2. Psychological impact -> e.g bad results at school -> consequences -> again, your PERSONAL view
3. Influence to humanity(teens) in a long-run -> e.g increased crime rates -> core: isolated societies (they are addicted to TY, youth do not go out and do not socialize) and etc -> connect to the main topic but not make a conclusion

4. Conclusion = it is up to you

Go0d luck at school


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