Good evening :O)
Here are my suggestions:
As television appeared in full colour the triumphal procession of movies began. Families started to have dinner in front of the TV, and family
discussions about what happened
day diminished. In
one stroke TV became the centre of family life;
great importance was attached
a nice TV with a big screen and a good sound system. I think people did not recognize how important their TVs were to them until they had broken down and people did not know anymore what to do with each other. TV had become a member of the family and not for just a few it was one of the most important ones. This is a confusing statement; do you mean "...become a member of the family for many families; and it was not just any family member, it was one of the most important ones."
In a gradual process a change of thinking took place in the minds
of people. The society began to
recognized the negative aspects of TV and started to attach a
lesser value to them; or at least they tried
. It will probably never be possible to imagine a life without TVs but I know many people today who do not even possess one. Well, most of them use to surf the internet a lot,
but that is another story.
Basically I think TV is something very useful. I'm thinking of great entertainment blockbusters
like StarWars has
brought to me. I'm thinking also of the ability to watch the news all over to world and in
the language of my choice. I
would never commit the mistake of underestimating the negative influence it can have on children
. Consumed in moderation, it is my opinion that TV may help to develop children language skills; b
ut if a kid starts to cry because of a broken TV or if the child prefers watching TV instead of playing outside with other children then something went wrong."
You've got a good rough draft here. Keep up the good work!