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Teenagers should not be allowed to date. Please review.


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Jun 18, 2008, 07:10pm   #
Teenagers between the ages thirteen to nineteen should not be dating. In their decisions of dating should have considered importantly before dating. If teenagers were to date, there will be involved in an early maturity period and face many problems, such as the positive and negative impacts, the responsibility and burden might lead to, and the development of social maturity consists in early adulthood. For many teenagers dating is a habit of love and friendship, it's normal to have, but it's dangerous if you did not listen to your parent's guidance. In fact, teenagers are too young to struggle around for a relationship or starts dating with another person.

The positive and negative impacts are more frequently happens to teenagers today in dating. In dating with another person involves social participation and mature experiences. At first, dating can be very joyful and an attempt of new love, then possible of premarital sex in love and hanging out may result of drug and alcohol use. The facts are it will affect teenagers' health in negative ways. Alcohol can cause extreme emotion, meaning the way of physical acting, and drug can cause depression of the brain, which will lower school grades. In comparison, there are more negative impacts rather than positive.

Dating in teenager might result in unnecessary responsibilities and burdens. It is evident that teenager starts to date with a mate in high school and starts more dating after the first one; the consequences are there will be a time to stop or go on. For example if you were to choose to go on, then you will be developing a further relationship with each other. Afterward, occur of sex and family issues will soon happen. For instance, many sixteen years old teenagers today started their own family and drop out of high school to become a full time employee.

The early adulthood is always interacting with the development of social maturity; it is when dating becomes relationship. First love is the first step toward social maturity. The second step is when relationship becomes great responsibilities. The third step is making a living in this crucial world. These are the several development levels of social maturity in early adulthood. In real life, teenagers might not be aware of them.

For most of our teenagers, we are not aware of the decisions we make and the consequences. Sometimes our parent's guidance can be helpful or otherwise we will be involved in situations of facing early maturities where we cannot maintain ourselves. In every aspect views of "Teenager Dating" between the ages of thirteen to nineteen years old is defiantly too young to start a date. Above all, teenagers should not be allowed to date.
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Here are my suggestions:

"Teenagers between the ages thirteen to nineteen should not be dating. In their decisions of dating should have considered importantly before dating. This doesn't make sense; I'm not sure what you mean. Perhaps "Dating decisions should be taken seriously" or "The decision to begin dating should be seriously considered". If teenagers were to date, they would be involved in an early maturity period and face many problems, such as the positive and negative impacts, the responsibility the burden might lead to, and the development of social maturity in early adulthood. For many teenagers dating is a habit of love and friendship that is normal to have, but it is dangerous if you did not listen to your parent's guidance. In fact, teenagers are too young to struggle around for a relationship or start dating with another person. Why, exactly? You've told us numerous times that it is harmful, but not why.

The positive and negative impacts more frequently happen to teenagers today in dating. Dating with another person This is unnecessary, because dating, by definition, involves another person; this statement is redundant the way it stands, so take it out. involves social participation and mature experiences. At first, dating can be very joyful and an attempt at new love, then the possibility of premarital sex, and hanging out may result of drug and alcohol use. The facts You write of facts but do not provide any. Either cite facts or do not refer to ones that are not present. are it What? will affect teenagers' health in negative ways. Alcohol can cause extreme emotions, influencing the way of physical acting, and drugs can cause depression of the brain, which will lower school grades. In comparison, there are more negative impacts rather than positive. What does this have to do with dating?

Dating in teenagers might result in unnecessary responsibilities and burdens. It is evident that teenagers start to date in high school and start more dating after the first one; the consequences is there will be a time to stop or go on. For example if you were to choose to go on, then you will be developing a further relationship with each other. Do you mean dating more than one person, or developing a single relationship further? This is confusing; please clarify. Afterward, occurances of sex and family issues will soon hppen. For instance, many sixteen year old teenagers today start their own family and drop out of high school to become full time employees. Where is your source for this claim? Provide supporting documentation or remove the statement.

The early adulthood is always interacting with the development of social maturity; it is when dating becomes relationship. First love is the first step toward social maturity. The second step is when relationships [/font] great responsibilities. The third step is making a living in this crucial world. [font#FF0000]This is irrelevant; it has nothing to do with teenage dating. These are several development levels of social maturity in early adulthood. In real life, teenagers might not be aware of them. Sources?

For most of our What is your relation to the group you are referring to? teenagers, we Are you including yourself in this group, or are you an outside observer? If you include yourself in this group, the viewpoint of the whole essay will need to be rewritten; if you are not, change this pronoun to "they" or take the pronoun out completely. are not aware of the decisions we make and the consequences. Sometimes our parent's guidance can be helpful or otherwise we will be involved in situations of facing early maturities where we cannot maintain ourselves. In every aspect views of "teenager dating" Do not randomly capitalize words in the middle of sentences; capitalization is reserved for proper nouns: specific people, places, locations, and concepts. between the ages of thirteen to nineteen years old is defiantly too young to start a date. Why? You have not told us why they are incapable of handling the responsibilities of dating. Above all, teenagers should not be allowed to date."

This essay needs quite a bit of work. Make sure you stay on your topic; you wander off the point quite a bit throughout the whole text.
Even if this is an opinion essay, you need to have resources and supplementing documentation to support your assertions and opinions, which you do not have.
You also spend a lot of time telling us that it is dangerous for teenagers to date and the negative things that could/will result from it, but you do not explain why they are incapable of developing such relationships, leaving your essay incomplete.
Watch your viewpoint throughout the essay; if you are including yourself in the group of teenagers you are writing about, it's fine to use "we", but you will need to rewrite the essay entirely from that viewpoint. If you are not, watch the use of "we", "us", and "our"; one minute you are writing as an outsider, then instantaneously switch to being an insider, then to an outsider again. It's confusing to your readers.

I hope this helps.

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Gloria
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