Teachers are the second parents in the school. Morale educations are properly be applied in the school by teachers. While others believe the academic subjects are the only one that need to be taught by teachers.
Can you rewrite this introduction in properly structure which contains; hook, background and thesis statement?
While (subject + verb), (subject + verb).
or
(Subject + verb), while (subject + verb).
Did you remember a concluding sentence? if the last sentence is your conclusion, I think between your topic sentence and conclusion missed. I suggest you to read sample answer and learn about how to make topic sentence and conclusion stronger.