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"Teachers' role in the classroom"; IELTS


annguyen 5 / 9 2  
Oct 14, 2012   #1
As computer are being used more and more in education, there will be no role for teachers in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree?

Undeniably, the immense advance of computers has made an impact on most aspects of people's lives, especially in the field of education. Computers are considered to be essential studying tools, which leads to the opinion that teachers no longer play any role in the learning process. However, I am convinced that the presence of teachers in class will be maintained.

In the first place, teachers are of substantial help to students. Throughout their teaching, teachers possibly learn the strengths and weaknesses of individual student. Accordingly, they can orient each student towards efficient studying methods. Moreover, there is no doubt that computers provide students with a great source of information as well as materials for learning. Nevertheless, this tremendously available source seemingly makes students disorientated. Consequently, students who are under the guidance of teachers probably choose relevant documents to them.

In the second place, it should be noted that the interaction between teachers and students is particularly vital in the process of learning. In the classroom, students can directly put questions to teachers so as to thoroughly understand any complex concepts, instead of spending much time searching on computers. Furthermore, it is possible for individuals to exchange opinions in class. By this way, not only can students give their voices to others but also accumulate experience from teachers specializing in certain subjects. Clearly, students stand a chance of acquiring knowledge more easily thanks to teachers.

As the above discusses, to my viewpoint, it is crucial to maintain the role of teachers in the classroom. With their profound knowledge, teachers can guide students to the right track of studying as well as to learn invaluable experience. Although computers provide us with diverse information, they should serve as a subordinate role in the learning process.
williamcosta 2 / 2  
Oct 14, 2012   #2
I would suggest you to work on grammar and try to improve it.

Throughout their teaching, teachers become aware of weaknesses and strengths of a student.

I would also advise you do not try to make your writing too much complex.
Also you have overused the linkers.
Almost every sentence contains linker. Try to use referents more often than linkers. For example, this, they etc. In this way your writing will become interesting to read.

Best of luCK
w_even 6 / 14 1  
Oct 15, 2012   #3
Your writing skills are very good :)
May I ask how do you practice writing essays. If you could share with me some tips to improve english skills.
Alyssa 3 / 6  
Oct 15, 2012   #4
I think your argument of this issue is really great.
I have one suggestion for you : try to decrease the use of "accordingly" "nevertheless",etc.
It will improve your writing smoother.
OP annguyen 5 / 9 2  
Oct 16, 2012   #5
if I want to give an example in the first paragraph in the body like this:
" Accordingly, they can orient each student towards efficient studying method as well as suitable learning materials. Take me for example, when my teacher said that my reading skill needed to be improved and suggested some e-books, I made a search for this type of material on computer. As a result, I gained my skill of reading comprehension."

"Take me for example, "=> Should I put a comma or a full stop here?


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