a Table about proportion of female & male genders in sports

The table provides information about proportion of both genders who took part in sport acting during approximately one month in U.K around 2002. The company was made between five different sport categories.

Overall, participation of men in these five various types of extreme sports were much greater than women. For instance, the boys participants in Cue sports were five times the number of girls participants. Moreover, compare with the percentage of females, more than twice as many males participated in cycling. Although over 50% male-genders involved in one activity or more, female-genders involving in it was considerable high also (around 50%).

Exceptionally, average of girls in Yoga and keeping fit sports were far greater than average of boys who involved in it. At the bottom of the list, swimming proportion for both genders was almost similar. Same pattern was seen in Walking-sports. Undoubtedly, involvements of men in extreme sports were mostly common rather than women.

Firstly, you should have uploaded the table so it is easier to check.

The table provides information about proportion of both genders who tooktaking part part in sport actingactivities during approximately(approximately sounds odd here) one month in theU.K(you better write United Kingdom)aroundin 2002. The companycompany? may be comparison? was made between five different sport categories. You should have named the categories.

Overall, participation of men in these five various types of extreme sports were much greater than womenmore men participated in extreme sports than women . For instance, the number ofboysmale participants in Cue sports werewas five times the number of girlsfemale participants. MoreoverIn addition , compare with the percentage of females, more than twice as many males participated in cyclingmore than twice as many males than females participated in cycling . (why don't you present the concrete info? ). Although over 50% male-genders involved in one activity or more, female-genders involving in it was considerable high also (around 50%).Incoherent centence

Exceptionally, the average of women in Yoga and keeping fit sports werewasfarmuch greater than the average of boysmenwho involved in itthese types of spots . At the bottom of the list, swimming proportion for both genders was almost similar.There was asmost the same number of both male and female participants in swimming . Same pattern was seen is in Walking-sports followed the same pattern as swimming . Undoubtedly, involvements of men in extreme sports werewas mostly common rather than that of women.

You should use concrete numbers when writing an essay for IELTS Task 1 because it is what essay-checker expects you to do.
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Best wishes, Mila

Yes, I agree with milamiller. Without seeing your table, it is quite difficult for us to verify the validity of your statements. Upload the table using the "Attach file(s)" feature in the Message block.

The table provides information about proportion of both genders who took part in sport actingactivitiesduring approximately one month(this is not very clear to me .... without seeing your table, I cannot understand what you mean by this ) in U.K around 2002.


.... this one has some major grammar issues :( ... Upload your table and then we would be able to give you our suggestions :)

I agree with both advisors above. Attach file menu is provided above the written box while you start a new treat.



The punctuation using is not appropriate to me. Common pattern is subject,appositive,verb.

I have similar problem with you, as my English is still not fluent and natural. I suggest you to read as many as authentic English writing such as journal, newspaper or magaines. It benefits for us to improve our English.

Good luck and keep writing.

It is not necessary to provide an example for ielts task 1. Your task is to present this report with formal tone.


This figure created the same trend as walking-sports.

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