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[IELTS ESSAY] Successful athletes can earn a great deal more money than others


CrazySnailer 2 / 3 2  
Jan 9, 2013   #1
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Some sports professionals can earn a great deal of money after they become successful compared with other important professionals which make some people think that it is unfair while others assume that it's fully justified. Personally, I tend to believe that it is reasonable to make a fortune after they become success.

The big fortune is a reward to their many years' dedicated round-to-clock practices. As it's known to us all, success covers a multiple of blenders which only a small proportion of them can achieve their success. Their perseverance and diligent spirits pave the way to success which should be respected by the society and rewarded by an amount of monetary encouragement. In turn this kind of monetary reward can act a catalyst for change in improving the enthusiasm and motivation of other athletes. On the contrary, if an athletes' success couldn't be recognized by the society there would be more people who are discouraged from pursuing their career, which is unbeneficial to facilitate the influence power of a nation.

On the contrary, we should admit that the over-high income by some sports professionals might lead to others' dissatisfaction because people in other important professions such as research scientists and top doctors, who also make an indispensable contribution to our nation, should be retreated equally. What's more, athlete superstars' high salaries are demined by their popularity to the public instead of their contributions to the society.

As far as I can see, athlete superstars' success covers plenty of obstacles and they also suffer extreme painful practices which is unimaginable to the ordinary people. It is undeniable that they should be rewarded with a wealth of money.
devabe2005 46 / 97  
Jan 9, 2013   #2
spelling mistake demined i think it is determined
demined by their popularity to the public instead of their contributions to the society.

corrected will be as follows
determined by their popularity to the public instead of their contributions to the society.

overall good essay.


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