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A student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher.


Naph 9 / 17 6  
May 21, 2015   #1
I am going to ready for the TOEFL exam.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
A student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher.

I am of the personal opinion that one should a student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher, and such an opinion is based on the reasons elaborated below.

I believe that a student in good relationship with his teacher has the high motivated to learn, which I suppose can be best illustrated by when a student loved his teacher, he called to question from his teacher and in addition, especially primary school, the students who are the first experience of presence in school they have the good memorize from their teacher. Moreover, I think the impression of the teacher has a positive role to increase performance a student, as in the case of I have a math teacher in the high school that he was very kind and friendly with me and she effect to process of learning for me and I could get a top score in the class. Another point worth considering is the fact that a teacher can be to provide a calm environment for students, for instance, in a pacific situation a student has the deep relation to their teacher that could be solved a lot of problems about their course. I would also like to point out that a student who is to like his teacher can be more regular than other students that do not like their teacher, for example, when I was going to school I like my teacher this is because, I did not absent in his class. Finally, I would like to say that I think the kind teacher is as a friend for their student, like a student could be to say his the problems to his teacher that happened in his the life of private also this student did not concern about anything the busy his mind and he could more succeed in school.

In order to wrap up I would like to reiterate that I think a student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher should be undeniable and students that feel relax to their teacher have a better learning.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
May 22, 2015   #2
Para 1:
This is good. Yet, the sentence is too close to the prompt. Why don't you try to paraphrase it? here is my sample;
The effective classroom is based on a positive relationship. As such, the idea that teacher should attract students' attention is the most valued by some people. Also, students are required to love their teacher so as to build a strong feeling. By doing so, I believe that both teacher and students will contribute a positive learning environment.

If you could break the second paragraph into several ones, then I'll help you check the grammar.
Thanks, eddy suaib.
OP Naph 9 / 17 6  
May 22, 2015   #3
Dear, eddies
My English teacher told me, to reduce me false in a sentence I should write in 3 paras.
I re-write my essay based on siddiqumar correction.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

A student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher.
I am of the personal opinion that one should a student must like a teacher in order to learn from the teacher, and such an opinion is based on the reasons elaborated below.
Trias 23 / 41 14  
May 23, 2015   #4
Hi, please see my suggestions below:

If a sentence is too long, there will be a chance of reader to not understand, or misinterpret it. For example:
I believe that a student in good relationship with his teacher has the high motivated to learn, which I suppose can be best illustrated by when a student loved his teacher, he called to question from his teacher and in addition, especially primary school, the students who are the first experience of presence in school they have the good memorize from their teacher.

I suppose this sentence contains a main idea and a supporting detail, which is an example. Here is my recommendation:
From my perspective, a student's relationship with his teacher relates closely with his motivation to study and active participation in class. For example, when his favorite Mathematics teacher is giving a question after explaining a subject, he constantly gives a try to answer the question.
EF_Carol - / 145 39  
Jun 2, 2015   #5
First of all your structure needs correcting! To begin with, include your reasons in the intro. Its too short! You need to introduce the key ideas right from the beginning.

the reasons elaborated below...

Should read: ...and these are...

Then Then include your two or three reasons within the same paragraph.
This is the proper order.

Next, you need to break up the main body into several paragraphs. Decide on the important points and devote one paragraph to each.

Another point worth considering...

This is a separate paragraph unto its own, making a stronger structure.

Lastly, you need to elaborate your conclusion. Its way too brief. Go over the main points you made in the body, and list them. Then make the summation point!

Good start! Just a few corrections. Your vocabulary and grammar are good.

ef _carol


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