NYU is global, urban, inspired, smart, connected, and bold. What can NYU offer you, and what can you offer NYU? (200-400 words)
Can you check for any grammatical errors.
I was also wondering if it would be appropriate to include a picture of The Starry Night within the text box on the common app essay.
A replica of Vincent Van Gogh's The Starry Night is taped to my bedside table. The shades of green, blue, yellow and white come together to shape the arc of the wind swirling across the sky above a small sleeping town. I can almost feel the breeze in Van Gogh's night sky allowing thoughts to flow through my mind. NYU can offer me this same serenity when I am sitting under the ivy laden shade trees or participating in the Mindfulness Projects, allowing me to expand my awareness. The Starry Night is composed of unique bold strokes all used to tell a story with each one adding dimension to the painting.
In my small sleepy town I have acquired certain ideas and perspectives of the world that I will bring to NYU. I will mix the primary colors of my town with the vibrant shades at NYU, with students from over 100 different countries all contributing their own hue, fusing together to create a tapestry. Van Gogh said, "Great things are done by a series of small things brought together."
I am a shade of light yellow found in the stars and wind of Van Gogh's painting. Yellow represents joy, intellect and energy. Yellow sings too loud, thinks too much and never stops moving; yet yellow has a creative energy that emanates onto everything around her. These are the qualities I will bring to NYU.
The plethora of academic choices offered and the variety of students at NYU bring together both intellect and creativity providing an atmosphere for growth. The creative energy and love for the arts and self expression coincides with my own interests. I look forward to visiting the Grey Art Gallery and exploring the city. When I am lying in my dorm at NYU the city lights outside my window will remind me of the light Vincent brought to The Starry Night and inspire me to actualize my true self.
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This is a highly poetic and visual idea of what NYU has to offer you and what you have to offer the university. It is a successfully written essay that brings the thoughts of how you plan to approach the course offerings and what you plan to offer the student community in a way that can be perceived lightly, yet seriously. You don't need to include a picture of the painting in the text box. the depiction you painted works very well already. Do you have a word limit? You can still add content to the essay if you wish to. I think it will only further improve it at this point :-)
