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spending a large amount of money on space exploration is justified or not?


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i am preparing for ielts, and i really worry about my writing, could u help me point out my mistakes about grammar, structures and logics, thansk so much

With all the troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other things.

People have spent...

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Nov 7, 2009, 03:31pm   #
Hi,
There are many people believe that , write, many people belives that the....
and, they also support to use this money the problems of modern societies. Mention the problems here.....
Give your point of agreement or disagreement in the starting para, so as to make reader understand about the essay points.
In conclusion mention the summary of the passage.
People have spent a large amount of money for universe exploration every year. There are Many people believe that humankind has been wasting money on space research, and they also ...

Obviously, we cannot deny the benefits that come from researching and exploring the universe.

First of all, people can use their financial resources to improve the quality of education systems. which is considered [s]being the majority of all countries around the world.[/s] What did that mean?

Furthermore, guarding against the breakout of diseases is also urgent issue that we need to solve as soon as possible.

None of your mistakes are very serious! You write very, very well in English!
thanks EF_Kevin so much. i have just rewritten and added your great idea into my essay.
could u check for me again, thanks so much
have a nice day
in the last time, i confused the meaning of the word "majority and priority" causing the unclear sentence.

People have spent a large amount of money for universe exploration every year. Many people believe that humankind has been wasting money on space research, and they also indicate that it would be much better to use this money to solve problems we have faced to in modern societies.

Obviously, we cannot deny the benefits coming from researching and exploring the universe. Scientists working on space missions help people understand more about the history of our planet as well as other planets in the space. Moreover, through studying and discovering the universe, human beings can predict the changes happening in the future, which can help people avoid disasters and adapt to the changes better.

However, there are a range of arguments against above opinion, and people believe that the money would be used more effectively to prevent and solve problems humankind has been confronting with nowadays. First of all, people can use their financial resource to improve the quality of education systems, which is considered being the priority of all countries around the world. A nation can develop only when it has high qualified personnel, which can just be gained with good education. Furthermore, guarding against the breakout of diseases is also urgent issue that we need to solve as soon as possible. Especially, in the third world, the developing countries, they lack money to upgrade health service systems. They really need more money to buy more health equipment, train more health workers, supply more medicines for the poor, and so on. When money is used for this purpose, there will be decrease in the number of people die every year by curable diseases due to lack of medicines such as tuberculosis, fever.

In conclusion, personally, I strongly believe that using this money to improve the quality of education and health services is much better than for the space discovery
Great! One idea for you: If you want to add another dimension to this, you can mention some OTHER expenditures that you do not think are as imortant. For example, some people believe that American military presence all over the world is not an appropriate expenditure. If you agree, maybe you should conclude by saying something about other costs that could be cut to make space exploration possible.

What you are discussing applies to science of all kinds -- medical science, physics, etc. Science takes a is neglected and underfunded when unnecessary spending takes place.
Nov 10, 2009, 11:10am   #
thanks so much Kevin. i know that if i can do it, my essay will be excellent. however, u know, when i take ielts, there is only 40 minutes for it. thus, i am afraid that it is not enough time for me.
any way, i will try it when my writing gets better. i have just posted an other essay, could u check for me , Kevin.
have a nice day



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