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IELTS: what sort of knowledge should universities provide to graduates?


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Sep 23, 2010, 12:48pm   #
Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer.
What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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What sort of knowledge should universities provide to graduates? Nowadays, it is a hot topic for a wide group of people, from potential students, tutors to politicians.
Whereas a basic or high schools provide general education, universities should not.
During our studies at high school we gain education, which should help group of us to pass a school leaving exam and find a good job and another group to prepare it to a university. But people studying at a university usually have the same target. The target is to gain a diploma and mainly to learn more about their branch. From this it can be clearly seen that at high school there students with totally different targets, whereas at university they have the same target.
On the first hand, because of that universities should provide knowledge and skills which are practical and separated for the branch you are studying. In order to educate experts in their branch the education should be more specific.
On the another hand, students should memorise theoretical subjects to train their brains. However, the best possibility is to memorise a subject which is related the most to studentīs branch and which can be used in practise.
Universities should also give students access to world of knowledge but it depends on each student how he or she will take the advantage of it.

Not each student will find a job in his branch. So it is difficult to say if a concrete knowledge or skills will be useful to an employer. I think that missing knowledge can be replaced by a company training. Although, a foundation has to be there to built on it.


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Sep 25, 2010, 01:45am   #
Hi,
You have good ideas. Just check whethr you cover the word count they insist on......... I'm not sure.
Please pay attention to what I suggest for the following para ;

During our studies at high school we gain education knowledge, which should helps group of us to pass a school leaving exam and find a good job and another group to prepare it to a university one set of students to qualify for the universities while the others to qualify for jobs. But However people studying at a the students who enroll with universityies too usually share the same target.The target is to gain a diploma and mainly to learn more about their branch.These students concentrate on acquiring more knoweldge and skills in specific fields, in which, they intend to find their future careers.

I'm not sure whether my punctuations are correct.
Hope someone would correct if I'm wrong
This is a good correction. Thanks Alahakon.

Another idea:
use "one one hand" ----> "on the other hand"

On one hand hand, universities should provide knowledge and skills which are practical and separated especially applicable to the branch you are studying. In order to educate experts in their branch the education should be more specific.
On the other hand, students...
Sep 28, 2010, 05:39am   #
Hi

Not each every student will would find a job in his branch. So it is difficult to say if a concrete knowledge or skills will be useful to an employer. (your idea is not clear. I think you better write this sentence again)I think believe that missing knowledge can be replaced by knowledge gap can be bridged bya company training. Although However, a foundation has to be there to builtd on it.
Sep 28, 2010, 07:19am   #
Hi Veruska!

I am not that sure that you covered the essence of the essay in your words. The topic was whether you believed that the university should "teach" the job -- for the sake of the employer, or should the university teach for the sake of the education. That is the essence of the essay, and it goes back to the early part of English and American literature when it was supposed that "Education should be made available for the 'sake' of the education," and not for the sake of the employee becoming employed. I am not too sure whether you touched on that point at all of enough.

In my own view, education should be made available to those who wish to obtain it, but for the sake of the education, not solely for the sake of employment. If employment is a manifestation of the education received, then so be it. But, the essence of the education should be merely to educate, make someone more aware of his or her surroundings.

Perhaps you might want to touch on that in your essay. Just a thought. :)

--Mark
Sep 28, 2010, 09:46am   #
Veruska:
Universities should also give students access to world of knowledge but it depends on each student how he or she will take the advantage of it.

Maybe this sentence could be made in this way with a couple of changes.

Universities should provide students with the access to academic world while it depends on whether they would like to take the advantage of it.
Sep 28, 2010, 10:16am   #
fordragon:
Veruska:
Universities should also give students access to world of knowledge but it depends on each student how he or she will take the advantage of it.

Maybe this sentence could be made in this way with a couple of changes.

Universities should provide students with the access to academic world while it depends on whether they would like to take the advantage of it.


I still think that the student should re-work the essay and make it on point, so that it better describes his or her feelings, and that it answers the prompt correctly. Then, and only then, can we correct the grammar and the spelling, etc.

--Mark



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