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Solutions for traffic problems - using public transportation system


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Traffic is one of the most common issues in the big cities around the world. Traffic may cause chemical pollution and also sound pollution. By Moving big companies from cities to countryside, managing the conflict hours, and encouraging people to use public transportation, we will overcome this problem.

There are lots of companies with a large number of employees in this area. These companies started to work years ago and grew slowly over these years. We should consider moving them to the countryside. By this change less employees drive in our cities and also the urban parts of our cities will improve. In addition people in the municipality, who are responsible for city planning, should not allow any more companies with a vast number of employees settle down in the center of the large cities because they will establish in the cities and relocating them will be harder than now.

Between 7 am to 9 am and between 4 pm to 6 pm are rush hours in our cities. By managing our time we will have good solution for the traffic. Those hours should not conflict with the hours which kids go to school or when they come back. Those hours should not conflict with the hours that banks start to work or finish their work .If it does conflict we should change our schools hours or our banks hours. By changing these schedules, the traffic will be significantly lighter because we had reduced the number of cars in the street in a certain time.

We need to encourage people to use the public transportation system, such as, metro, train, buses or even shuttle. To achieve this goal, we can return part of the taxes belong to the people who used metro for a year, or a family who have just one family car. Also by increasing the number of buses in our cities, people will encourage to use buses. By purchasing a couple of hundred new modern and elegant buses also we can catch everybody's attention to use them.

These three solutions will make traffic lighter, but certainly will not solve the traffic problems. Finally by training our next generation to replace a bicycle with a car in the short trip .we will solve the traffic problems slowly over the years.

Apr 22, 2010, 01:29pm   #
By moving big companies...
There are lots of companies with a large number of employees in this area.- which area?
By this change Thus, less employees will drive in our cities...

In addition people in the municipality, who are responsible for city planning, should not allow any more companies with a vast number of employees settle down in the center of the large cities because they will establish in the cities and relocating them will be harder than now.- long sentence.- Municipalities should enact acts forbidding huge companies from settling down in the city centres, since their further relocation can turn into hard process

Those hours should not conflict with the hours which when kids go to school or when they come back. Those hours should not conflict and with the hours that when banks start to work or and finish their work. If it does conflict we should change our schools hours or our banks hours. By changing these schedules taking these measures, the traffic will be significantly lighter because we had reduced will reduce the number of cars in the street in a certain time. - I would paraphrase the sentence: These measures will lighten the traffic by reducing the number of cars in streets at certain hours.

To achieve this goal, we can return part of the taxes belong to the people who used metro for a year, or a family who has just one family car.

I liked your reasons.
Summarize your points in a conclusion!

best of luck!
Apr 22, 2010, 03:44pm   #
Finally by training our next generation to replace a car with a bicycle......
the introduction can be little elaborated.
all the best to you
In between the first and second sentence, it would be great to add another sentence to help introduce the topic. Tell a little more about the situation in the second sentence, and then write the third sentence Traffic may cause chemical pollution and also sound pollution. By moving big companies from cities to countryside, managing the conflict hours, and encouraging people to use public transportation, we will overcome this problem.

That way, paragraph one will have 3 sentences instead of 2.

This has excellent structure, because paragraph 1 tells 3 ideas and then the 3 body paragraphs present the ideas. Great job!! The conclusion, like the intro, needs to be longer. Add a sentence!!! You are doing great.

Finally, by training our next generation to use a bicycle rather than a car for any short trip, we will solve traffic problems slowly over the years.



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