Writing topic: Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in big city. Which place would you prefer to live in?
In a few years I will finish my studying in the university and I will have to decide whether to live in a small town or a big city. As I am eager to get a good job and explore different places, I think I would prefer to live in a city.
Big city life provides many opportunities. First of all, it will be easier for me to find an engineering job in the city. Electrical engineering deals with problems concerning electricity supply. Therefore, a big city can offer me many more vacancies than a small town.
At the weekends, there is a great number of things to do in the metropolis. There are numerous bars, cafes and restaurants where I can go with my friends. Multinational cities have restaurants with different national cuisines. I am fond of Italian food, and if there is an Italian restaurant in the city, I will definitely visit it. .
A night club is an interesting place to visit for young people. There a person can listen to music, make new friends or enjoy a a drink alone. Cultural life of a metropolis is always an entertaining one. I am keen on museums and it would be a pleasure for me to spend several hours a week in front of famous paintings, sculptures or artifacts. On special dates, city offers free exhibitions which are available for everyone who is interested in art.
What's more, cities have better medical facilities than in the countryside. This can at least assure me that if I feel bad, city can provide a high quality help.
In conclusion, while small towns have picturesque nature and pure air, big cities offer countless amount of opportunities and entertainment places. Considering all the benefits, I would choose to live in a big city.
Multinational cities (multinational cities - doesn't sound right, does it?)
A night club is an interesting place to visit for young people .There a personwhere young people can listen to music, make new friends or enjoy a drink alone.
if I feel bad ( you mean sick ?) , city can provide a high quality helphealth care services .
Just an idea!
In a few years I will finish my studying in the university and I will have to decide whether to live in a small town or a big city.
This sentence does not have major grammar errors.... However it does not provide a strong opening for your essay... Finishing your studies and choosing a city to live seems to have a poor correlation. When you finish studies, you would want to do a job and this job would demand you to choose a place for living... I think you have omitted the most important link.... :)deepakbaniya, thanks for corrections!
dumi....Let me ask you why you use so many dots?
I disagree with you. When I finish a university, I will have opportunity to choose whether to work in a big city or in a town. I will choose where to live, not the job would demand me to choose a place for living
I used dots, just to convey my idea with pauses and that's the way i speak English ; my comment does not resemble a part of your essay.... I just expressed my view and if you do not agree, that's just fine. This is a forum for discussion :)
i think you should lengthen your essay,as far as i have known,it is a toefl essay and i have written this topic :D
Dumi;
When you finish studies, you would want to do a job and this job would demand you to choose a place for living.
Anton, the above suggestion from Dumi provides very effective opening or introduction for your essay if you accept her idea. You stated
After finishing college you have to choose to live in city or small town.after this sentence you are telling that, " because you want good job."
The sequence of incidents appears little bit awkward. As suggested by Dumi after college you have to look for job and such job want you
to decide whether you choose to live in small town or big cities. After writing this if you write . " I choose big cities because they have
good physical infrastructures, recreation facilities ..." This gives more smooth flow in your essay .
Just an idea!
Yeah I'd agree Deepak. Well, I could'nt find much mistakes as I'm just 13, but still I found it as a great essay!
