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[IELTS Essay] Serveral langages die out every year, Is it not important? AD


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Several languages die out every year, that is not important because life will become easier if there are fewer languages in the world. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


There are some languages disappear every year. Some people think that is not important because life will become easier and efficiency if people no need to spend their limited time to learn and understanding other languages. However, I donít agree this opinion and I think we should protect all the languages exist in the world.
The main reason that we should protect the languages which is dying out every year is the language brings its own culture. It can preserve the culture and strengthen the ethnic cohesion. For example, in my hometown, there are lots of old songs in Cantonese about the traditional events which can bring people think of our culture once hear the songs. Besides, we would like to speak Cantonese with our special assent which can make us feel more close to the others. Moreover, maintain the language diversity could help to promote international peace and understanding. We also can learn different languages and cultures to enrich our mind.
On the other hand, it is true that the communications would become easier if all of us use one language in the world. We donít need to spend time to learn a new language and we can understand the others more easily. As a result, we can have more energy to keep pace to the new technology in the modern world. However, I cannot image how the world would become if only one language remain in the future. The cultures may be damaged. For example, nowadays, not all the people can recognize the ancient symbols carved on the stone thousand years ago. So we cannot fully understand the culture in the past.
In conclusion, we should protect the languages which are dying out to preserve its cultures and strengthen the ethnic cohesion. Moreover, we can learn one common language to improve our communications with others in all over the world and make the life easier.

Dec 20, 2012, 01:23pm   #
There are some languages disappear every year.
==>>There are many languages which disappear every year.

Some people think that is not important because life will become easier and efficiency if people no need to spend their limited time to learn and understanding other languages.
==>>Some people think that it is not important because life will become easier and more efficient if people do no need to spend their limited time to learn other languages.

However, I don't agree this opinion and I think we should protect all the languages exist in the world.
==>>However, I think we should protect every languages from extinct.

If you spend more time in studying grammar, your essay will be better.
Dec 21, 2012, 07:07am   #
christyzhongs:
Some people think that is not important because life will become easier and efficiency efficient if people no need to spend their limited time to learn and understanding other languages.

Some people believe that it is not important to protect all dying languages because the life would be easier and more efficient if we have a few languages to communicate.
Good Introduction!
christyzhongs:
The main reason that we should protect the languages which is are dying out every year is the language brings its own culture.
....... Good point............... language is dying/ languages are dying
The main reason why we should make efforts to keep languages alive is that language is the base for one's cultural authenticity. The culture would not exist without the language.

christyzhongs:
There are lots of old songs in Cantonese about the traditional events which can bring people think of our culture once hear the songs.

There are many traditional songs in Cantonese that vividly describe the authentic feature of our culture.
Dec 21, 2012, 10:33am   #
christyzhongs:
Some people think that is not important because life will become easier and efficiency if people no need to spend their limited time to learn and understanding other languages.

Some people believe that learning new languages is a waste of time and that life would become easier and more efficient if the world had only a few languages.

christyzhongs:
The main reason that we should protect the languages which is dying out every year is the language brings its own culture.

This sentence has a few issues. It would be better to rephrase it.
Thanks all! Good suggestions.

Here is the revised version, any other suggestions?

There are many languages disappear every year. Some people think that it is not important because life will become easier and more efficient if we have fewer languages to communicate. However, I do not agree this opinion and I think we should protect every language from extinct.

The main reason that we should protect the languages which is dying out every year is the language brings its own culture. The main reason why we should make efforts to keep languages alive is that language is the base for oneís cultural authenticity. The culture would not exist without the language. It can preserve the culture and strengthen the ethnic cohesion. For example, in my hometown, there are lots of old songs in Cantonese about the traditional events which can bring people think of our culture once hear the songs. There are many traditional songs in Cantonese that vividly describe the authentic feature of our culture. Besides, we would like to speak Cantonese with our special assent which can make us feel more close to the others. Moreover, maintain the language diversity could help to promote international peace and understanding. We also can learn different languages and cultures to enrich our mind.

On the other hand, it is true that the communications would become easier if all of us use one language in the world. We do not need to spend time to learn a new language and we can understand the others more easily. As a result, we can have more energy to keep pace to the new technology in the modern world. However, I cannot image how the world would become if only one language remain in the future. The cultures may be damaged. For example, nowadays, not all the people can recognize the ancient symbols carved on the stone thousand years ago. So we cannot fully understand the culture in the past.
In conclusion, we should protect the language which is dying out to preserve its cultures and strengthen the ethnic cohesion. Moreover, we can learn one common language to improve our communications with others in all over the world from other countries and make the life easier.



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