Technology is not going to disappear, family communication will not diminish if it is monitored and controlled.
I like your straightforward writing style. Now I want to suggest a way to make your essays leave a deep impression on the mind of readers.
First, I suggest not starting with a 'statement of the obvious.' Your first several sentences are all obvious. The quoted sentence above should perhaps be moved to the beginning so that it becomes the first sentence of the essay. But add 'and':
Technology is not going to disappear,
and family communication will...
That makes an interesting first sentence.
Now find the sentence that tells the reader clearly that it has both good and bad effects and that we stay mindful of the specific dangers that come with our dependence on it. Put that sentence at the end of the first paragraph.
All the writing is great! I just want to see if you can use the first sentence of the first paragraph to INTRIGUE the reader and use the last sentence of the first paragraph to express the main message of the essay. : )