Bero, while the essay that you wrote was quite informative. It was more of a personal essay that simply spoke of your background instead of answering the key dictate of the prompt which is to
Please reflect on what you consider to be an important personal experience related to your talents, interests, or commitments.
Therefore, you need to choose a talent, interest, or commitment on your part which you can discuss in the essay. You did not make reference to any of the three choices for the topic, hence the essay prompt was not correctly satisfied. I suggest that you choose a talent of yours or a commitment that you have made in life, perhaps pertaining to your college education, and then explain how striving to achieve that has helped you prepare for a Rutgers education. Now, this will take a little research on your part because you need to know what a Rutger education is all about. Going to the university website should be able to help you learn about the objectives, goals, and mission of the university. Perhaps you will find something in your past experiences that will connect directly to one of those descriptions. Discuss those in order to properly answer the prompt.
While your essay says a lot about you and I can tell that you tried your best to satisfy the prompt, your answer was not as pointedly direct and did not really reveal anything in relation to the prompt specifics, which is why I am advising you to revise the essay after doing some research and reflection. I believe that the essay will benefit from that process of development on your part. Try your hand at the revision. We are here to help you out :-)