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sedating music - There are many different types of music in the world today.


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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
Thesis statement: Music is a part of our life, no matter it is traditional or international.

Music is an inevitable part of our life. We do not even know when and where people first started to listen for music. It is obvious that music is as old as the human being in this world. We were listening to the different sounds and the type of rhythms even when we are not brought out to this world of noise and rhythms and music. Even those who think they are not musical person are able to differentiate between the rhythms and beat of music carefully and enthusiastically.
I would roughly separate music in two parts. First is stimulating music. This particular type of music affect us by it is inappropriate rhythm and stimulate to more actively acting like awaking after having a good sleep.
Second part is sedating music. Some of us would have this type of music because; it helps us to be more sedate when we need it. Many of us need music after a hard work. Some enjoy while the driving. We need it even when we are sad. Every our mood demands appropriate type of music. Even being an infant often we need music before sleeping. In most of the cultures it is practiced to sing sedating song to a child while sleeping. Music is even useful for warriors in war for encouraging them to be braver.
If to speak about the importance or the difference between country music and international music, no matter what we are listening to, traditional music is the part of particular culture. Each culture has various forms of music. We are free to choose whatever.
For conclusion I would say that, music is in our minds beginning from our birth until our death. Music is an inseparable part of this world. We cannot live without music being the part of this world of full noise and beat. I think, music is the same to our soul, like the bath to our body.

I am thankful in advance for your comments. I also dare to ask you to estimate my essay writing. I am preparing for IELTS General examination and will be very thankful if you would share your experience with me and estimate my essay writing and give approximate mark.

Mar 2, 2010, 02:36pm   #
plotophyte:
Music is an inevitable part of our life

Watch the little things ... this should be "lives" instead of "life." Life is singular ... one life to live. Lives is plural.

plotophyte:
to listen for music

We'd say, "to music" instead of "for music."

We were listening to the different sounds and the types of rhythms even when we are not brought out to this world of noise and rhythms and music.
I am not sure what you are trying to say in the second part of this: when we are not brought out to this world of noise and rhythms and music.

plotophyte:
Even those who think they are not musical person

Watch your numbers agreement again. "Those" and "they" are plural, but "person" is singular.
Mar 4, 2010, 04:12am   #
hi, I'm not good.
I will share my experience.
"For conclusion" - everybody uses this word.
If you choose another word, it is sounded better.
You essay is great!
Thesis statement: Music is a part of our lives, and it is meaningful regardless of whether it is traditional or international.

It is obvious that music is as old as the human race in this world.

We were listening to the different sounds and the types of rhythms even when we had not fully developed this modern world of noise and rhythms and music.

Even those who think they are not musical people are able to differentiate between the rhythms and beats of music carefully and enthusiastically.

This particular type of music affects us by serving as an appropriate rhythm to stimulate more activity and assist in awakening after having a good sleep.

I like your way of dividing music into stimulating and sedating. good idea!!



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