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IELTS: The same money for sport activities or libraries? They assemble money from learner


Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Mar 26, 2014   #1
Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Answer:

As we know, University is build and place that it gives benefit for many students because it gives knowledge about lessons for us. In here, Academy should give the same amount of money to their students sport activities as they confer to their University libraries. I totally disagree about this statement. However, if I look from other side, I agree about this. Therefore, I will accord several reasons about that.

I believe that University want to give better for their students. I think Academy often give money for libraries because it is very useful for many learner for improving knowledge no directly with read several books in the library. However, University give money too to their students sport activities, but different amount of money as they give to their College libraries. For instance, Syiah kuala University has library large and every year they always change some books in there. It needs much money because they order International books. These different with their students sport activities. They just support a little money for sporting because I think that they are not worries that. I sometimes look in my College as Science Faculty in there always stand alone. They assemble money from learner that follow it. Therefore, I think University should not give the same amount of money between sport activities and College libraries.

From other side, I agree about this statement because some of University give of money too to their students sport activities. They give the same amount of fund with College libraries, but it is form other. For example, Academy prepare Scholarship largest for their learner that active in sport activities and they have predicate very good in sport. Therefore, I think University give the same amount of money between sport activities and University libraries.

To sum up, I believe that University want to give the same amount of money, but they change money to form other that balance.

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MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Mar 26, 2014   #2
As we know, University is build and place that it gives benefit for many students because it gives knowledge about lessons for us

Universities are places where students can acquire a large amount of worthwhile knowledge.

In here, Academy should give the same amount of money to their students sport activities as they confer to their University libraries. I totally disagreeaboutwith this statement. However, if I look from other side, I agree about this.

This part is pretty confusing. What is your final opinion on this statement?

University

You don't have to capitalize the first letter of university as it is not a proper noun.
Also, you should pay careful attention to your grammar!
BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Mar 27, 2014   #3
n here, Academy should give

... I think you should not use capital in Academy
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Mar 27, 2014   #4
As we know, University is build and place that it gives benefit for many students because it gives knowledge about lessons for us.

your sentence is quite confusing
University is built as a place to give much knowledge which is knowledgeable for students.

I totally disagree about this statement. However , if I look from other side, I agree about this. Therefore , I will accord several reasons about that.

Too much linked, i worry it will be overusing.

I tend to disagree about this statement, while there are some reasons to agree.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Mar 27, 2014   #5
University is build

... wrong grammar - University is built

There are several issues with your writing. Grammar, vocabulary, clarity, presentation etc.
ernhy 17 / 28  
Mar 27, 2014   #6
Syiah kuala University

I think you can write Syiah Kuala University... :)
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Mar 28, 2014   #7
if I look from other side, I agree about this.

this idea is too general.

many learnerS

confer to

Write 'confer with'.

I believe that University want to give better for their students.

Give some specific examples to support this idea.

These different withfrom their students' sport activities.

library large

Write 'a large library.'

Academy prepare Scholarship largest for their learner that active in sport activities

bad grammar.

I find many problems: grammar, vocabulary, sentence, idea.
Suggestion: Read as many IELTS writings as you can to improve your writing skills. This help you find some ideas and improve your vocabulary and grammar.


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