Hellooo friend... :D
; therefore,
I have seen this from some corners of the world. However, you'd better use the high standard one by putting a period before
therefore, not semi-colon.
nursing homes may offer professional service to old age people but it cannot provide
what refers to...???
the country where we live in, is bound by moral values and social responsibilities.
Try not to split the subject and the verb by putting one comma.
Possible suggestion: the country
(a comma) where we live in
(a comma) is ...
pattern in " agree or disagree" essay
you take a position, then need a lilt 'struggle' to defend it strongly by giving a reason to support your point of view. In the next paragraph, it is useful to acknowledge the opposite view (counter argument) and say why you don't accept it.
5 or 4 paragraphs?Well, if you have a question that you don't like at all, then you can write with a 5-paragraph essay. You write one introduction, three bodies, and one conclusion. In the bodies, you will argue more on one side than the other by writing two content paragraphs arguing for and one against. This can help you write more words, but some students, that I see, put
grandiose ideas, by writing too many words. Uppsss.., remember, 40 minutes to finish your essay are a must :D
Look at what Dumi suggests you with the structure (a 4-paragraph essay). With this structure, you are easy to develop your paragraph properly, one content paragraph for, and one againts. This is
good for coherence and cohesion between the sentence-to-paragraph-to-essay construction, and for which in the five-paragraph structure this is weak.
Hope this helps :D