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The two charts show the reasons why people decide to study and how adults think
the cost of their education should be shared.
the first chart, as can be seen that the reasons in this...
But when it goes to the bottom group, the gap between the two groups
was increased further when the figures decrease to 12% of ability to changes jobs and 9% of meeting people.--I fixed this as much as I could, but it is still a little unclear. I don't know how to fix it. But I suggest using short, simple sentences when you try to describe something complex, like a chart.
s regards, helpful for current jobs is a head of improving prospects of promotion and enjoying learning or studying by a narrow margi
This part is very confusing, and I don't know how to fix it.
This is a very good sentence:
Turning to the second pie chart, it shows that how people think the cost in each course should be shared.
40% of them think adults should pay individually.
The number of people comment that employers should pay is 35% was greater than the number of people who think tax payers should pay, which was 25%.
You still need a lot of practice with English grammar. But it is also true that this kind of writing, describing charts, is very difficult. I would be interested in seeing how well you can write about a different topic.