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Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence


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Jan 12, 2011, 01:27am   #1
Todays, some researchers according their researches believe that the genetic factors are much more influences on our personality than any other factors. But some physiologists think family and society factors are more effective because a lot of samples indicates these diverses.

According some researches genetic factors can indicate human personality and predict their future lifestyle. These researches believe every environment factors can not an effective influence, moreover, everybody will comeback to main genetic personality after a little time and after any experience in is or her life.

On the other hand, some psychologists believe any experience can be effective in human personality and some characteristics of people can be changed after an important event in their life like high school or university experience. They investigate a lot of samples in period of time and find they could have changed some samples with a little consulting. Moreover they carried out a lot of changing with accurate studding all of experiences that samples had had in their life.

In my view, genetic factors are so important but if we notice to influence of any event that may happen in our life we can develop our personality effective. Although some happen related to society events but if we think about them accurately we will find that we should have or could have been better.

In conclusion, although we can ignore the effect of genetic factors, human personality was shaped with family and society experiences so if we don't notice to all of them we can not know them completely.
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According to some researches genetic factors can indicate human personality and predict their future lifestyle. These researches believe every environment factors can not have an effective influence, moreover, everybody will comeback to main genetic personality after a little time and after any experience in his or her life.

They investigate a lot of samples in a period of time.Some find that they could have changed some samples with a little consulting. Moreover, they carried out a lot use another word, never use a lot, much, many or really when writingof changing with accurate studding all of experiences that samples had had in their life.

In my view, genetic factors are so important but if we notice to influence of any event that may happen in our life we can develop our personality effective. Although some happen related to society events but if we think about them accurately we will find that we should have or could have been better.

this paragraph does really make sense, the sentences seem awkward, like they are missing a word or something

In conclusion, although we can ignore the effect of genetic factors, human personality was is shaped withthrough family and society social experiences so if we don't notice to all of them we can not know them completely.I dont know what your trying to say in this last paragraph

dont have your last paragraph end in "in conclusion" especially for a college essay..it just sounds cliche

you need to really go back and just edit and fix the common errors and make sure your sentences are coherent. Good job though
Today, some researchers according their researches believe that the genetic factors are much more influences influential on our personality than any other factors.

But some physiologists think family and society factors are more effective because a lot of samples indicates these diverses??? What word should this be? ... a lot of samples indicate their influence?

Moreover they carried out a lot of changing changes with accurate studding ???what should this word be? ...all of experiences that samples had had in their life.

In my view, genetic factors are so important but if we notice need to influence of any event that may happen in our life we can develop our personality effectively.

Okay, my friend, practice typing these sentences with the corrections you have been given. Practice makes perfect!

Also, I think instead of "researches" you should write "research studies." For example:
Many research studies show that genetic factors affect personality.



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