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TOEFL: It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built


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Jul 26, 2011, 01:32pm   #
It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in
your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use
specific reasons and details to support your answer.



Although many people oppose to this plan, but I support of a new restaurant in our neighborhood. I prefer this plan as a fun, when we are in a hurry, and we need to eat foods quickly, and when there is no food at home.

Most of the people in a society, especially in these decades, go into the restaurants as a fun. Indeed, the varieties in the foods at restaurants are motivating the families. In this regard, I often go into the restaurants on the weekends, but if a new one be built in my neighborhood. I will go a week twice, and I can invite my friends in the restaurant.

Moreover, many people go into the restaurants when they are in a hurry, and they do not have enough time for cooking a meal. They sometimes can choose another way, waiting at home to be sent their foods. Nevertheless, it is possible that the food is not prepared, and we finally have to do our job without eating the food.

Furthermore, one of the most significant reasons for supporting this plan is, lacking the materials or the groceries at home, especially at night when most of the supermarkets or the grocery stores have closed and preparing them is hard. Also, I can not cook like many people. Therefore, I think our neighborhood needs to a new restaurant.

In conclusion, If we want to resolve our needs in our neighborhood such as when we are in a hurry, and there is no food at home or have a fun with the family. I suppose that we should have a restaurant.
Jul 27, 2011, 02:16am   #
Although many people oppose to this plan, but I support of a new restaurant in our neighborhood. I prefer this plan as a fun because it can bring me much fun and allow me to buy food when I'm in a hurry or there is no food at home., when we are in a hurry, and we need to eat foods quickly, and when there is no food at home.

In these decades, most of the people in a society, especially in these decades, go into the restaurants just for as afun. Indeed, various kinds of food at restaurants are motivatinges the families to have meals in the restaurants.

You make some good points, but I think the first example in the passage is not appropriate.
Hi Mostafa, remember this rule: Do not use ALTHOUGH with BUT.
You can choose one, but do not use both.
Although you can choose one, you should not use both.
Although you should choose one, but you should not use both.---This is incorrect.

Although many people oppose to this plan, but I support the building of a new restaurant in our neighborhood.

You can also do this:
Although many people are opposed to...


I prefer this plan because a new restaurant serves as a source of fun, helps us when we are in a hurry and need to eat food quickly, and helps us when there is no food at home.-----Type this sentence 100 times. It will teach you many lessons about English.

Most of the people in a society, especially in these decades, go into the restaurants as a way of having fun.


Furthermore, one of the most significant reasons for supporting this plan is that, lacking the materials or the groceries at home, especially at night when most of the supermarkets or the grocery stores have closed, people need an option if they get hungry.

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