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Reason why you want to buy carbon filter comforter mask


lespeed 2 / 3 1  
Jun 20, 2013   #1
This is my essay. I would be happy if you could help me to check grammar. Thanks!

Due to the work of mechanical workshop, often working in industrial environments which are contaminated by noise, dust and poison gas etc especially for the specialized welding team of workshop. So, equipping with carbon mask is important and necessary for work safety.

Be more specific, for the particular and important positions such as: grinding systems, grate cooler system and network of big fans etc. The positions have a narrow space and the circulation of air at low level. Therefore, equipping carbon masks is required and indispensable. On the one hand it impacts on workers' health on the other hand it impacts on the quality and rating progress of work.

To improve work safety as well as quality and rating progress of work. Workshop has completed the purchase of buying 100 carbon mask to equip and replaced several damaged masks.
karangoeluw 1 / 3  
Jun 21, 2013   #2
which are contaminated by noise, dust and poisonous gas

Personally, I'd omit "etc".

especially for the specialized welding team of workshop

This is vague. Clarify.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jun 24, 2013   #3
Due to the work of mechanical workshop, often working in industrial environments which are contaminated by noise, dust and poison gas etc especially for the specialized welding team of workshop.

...it's good if you can improve clarity of this line;
[i]The industrial enviroments are often polluted by noise, dust, poisnous gases etc., due to the nature of mechanical work carrired out in such sites.[/i]

So, equipping with carbon mask is important and necessary for work safety.

Therefore, being equipped with carbon mask is very important to ensure safety of the workers.


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