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IELTS: TASK 1 question - electricity usage in England


Tobi 6 / 10 1  
Aug 5, 2013   #1
The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how the electricity is used in an average English home.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates a normal daily usage of electricity in England in two different seasons. From the pie chart it is seen on what Englishmen utilize the electricity for.

It is immediately clear that the electricity demand during a winter day is much higher than during a summer's day. Evidently, the electricity in English homes is mostly used for room and water heating.

At an early hour of a summer day, the electricity demand level is at 15,000 units in comparison with the more than doubled figure (40,000) for the same time in winter. In the period between 6 and 10 a.m., a typical daily demand consistently decreases both in winter and summer, to 30,000 and 12,000 respectively. It is worth noting that the peak demand for electricity in winter (45,000 - midnight hours) and summer (12,000 - after midday) is followed by a rather sharp decrease.

Just over 17% of the electricity, in an average English home, is consumed by the kitchen equipment (ovens, kettles, washing machines), whereas the figure for heating rooms is nearly three times greater (52.5%). Remaining one third of the electricity is divided by lightning/TV/radio and vacuum cleaners/food mixers/electric tools, with both groups equally responsible for a half of 30%.

* Would be very nice to see comments on:
-word choice
-sentence structure
-essay structure
-and general estimated score for IELTS task 1 attempt


  • The graph and chart
Ibrahim_Xian 6 / 9 6  
Aug 5, 2013   #2
you need a conclusion in the end of your essay, otherwise , you will lost marks from not doing it


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