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'promote humanity and understanding among the people' - IELTS essay


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Dec 12, 2011, 06:38am   #
Topic;
Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Other disagrees and thinks that the host country should welcome cultural differences.
What do you think?
Customs and traditions allude towards the uniqueness of a country. Their predecessors endeavoured to develop and preserve their culture and undoubtedly they represent the country in the world. On this behalf people consider their culture as national heritage and want to keep on reviving it by pursuing their old traditions. However, in my opinion most ardent welcome of new culture would be prudent and beneficial.

Firstly, I believe by learning about new cultures we can become much more tolerant and can bring harmony to the society because of more social understanding and less social conflicts. When we learn and imitate foreign customs, it can actuate the visitors for friendship and moreover proved to be auxiliary to apprehend their hopes and worries and help them to get through their difficulties and survive in a new locality.

Secondly, it is true that nothing defines a culture more than its language and it is also true that limits of my languages are the limits of my world. If I learn the visitors, it will not only bridge the communication gap between us but it will also broaden my future career perspective. Fpr instance by accomplishing the skills of English language can open many ways to educate in best universities of the world.

Thirdly, if foreign traditions are beneficial and congenial then they can become the part of the lives of the local dwellers. Take the example drinking Chinese tea with meals, basically it is warm water helps in digestion, surely by following this conduct of the visitors will not mask the local customs.

However, the opponents consider that "do in Rome as Romans' do". When visitors come to a foreign land they should respect the local traditions and to indulge in the local community, they must attribute their selves to the local customs.

Concluding, I firmly believe that to promote humanity and understanding among the people learning about cultural difference in compulsory.
Dec 12, 2011, 08:13pm   #
Others disagree and thinks that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Customs and traditions allude towards the uniqueness of a country.

Their predecessors endeavored to develop and preserve their culture and undoubtedly they represent the countries in the world.

On this behalf people consider their culture a national heritage and want to keep on reviving it by pursuing their old traditions.

Firstly, I believe by learning about new cultures we can become much more tolerant and can bring harmony to the society because of more social understanding and less social conflicts.

When we learn and imitate foreign customs, it can actuate the visitors for friendship and moreover proved to be auxiliary to apprehend their hopes...

Secondly, it is true that nothing defines a culture more than its language, and it is also true that limits of my languages are the limits of my world.

If I learn the language of visitors, it will not only bridge the communication gap between us, but it will also broaden my future career prospects (?).

For instance, by accomplishing the skills of English language can open many ways to educate in best universities of the world.

Take the example drinking Chinese tea with meals; basically it is warm water that helps in digestion, surely by following this conduct of the visitors will not mask the local customs.---This sentence needs to be revised for clarity.

However, the opponents consider that "do in Rome as Romans' do". ---"When in Rome, do as the Romans do."

In conclusion, I firmly believe that to promote humanity and understanding among the people, learning about cultural differences is compulsory.

:)
Dec 13, 2011, 03:34am   #
Customs and traditions allude towards the uniqueness of a country. Their predecessors endeavoured to develop and preserve their culture and undoubtedly they represent the country in the world.
On this behalf Many people / / (Others)consider their culture as national heritage and want to keep on reviving it by pursuing their old traditions. However, in my opinion most ardent welcome of new culture would be prudent and beneficial.This essay will discuss positive aspect of new culture on our society.

My first reason is that by learning about new cultures we can become much
more tolerant and can bring harmony to the society because of more social understanding
and as well as less social conflicts. In addition,
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and imitate foreign customs, it can actuate the visitors for friendship.
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proved to be auxiliary to apprehend their hopes
and but worries also. Furthermore, these help them to get overcome through their difficulties and survive in a new locality.

My second reason is that cultures defines much about various languages. It is generally true that limits of my languages are the limits of my world. If I learn understand the visitors languages and different cultures, these can reduce the communication gap between visitors and local people but (You want add information don't use contrast connector). Another important factor that it could be broaden my future career perspective. Fpr For instance, by accomplishing the skills of English language can open many ways to educate in best universities of the world. (Unclear example). For example, if people learn international language English, they can be more more competent in particular language.

Last, but not least, if foreign traditions [font#FF0000]are would beneficial and congenial then they can become the part of the lives of the local dwellers. For example, drinking Chinese tea with meals, basically it is that warm water helps in digestion, surely by following this conduct of the visitors will not mask the local customs.
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In conclusion, I would say that if local people follow western tourist culture it could be many advantages to them and our society. Overall, I would recommend that we should adopt positive culture not the bad habits of western people.
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